Castle Dreams
T'was a time I lived in a castle
but I was not the king's lady fair
my life was not so elegant
still, I was happy living there
I was not a royal princess
nor maiden sitting in a tower
I had neither position nor standing
I was no one of regal power
A mere castle servant is what I was
waiting on the royal needs
but I was treated with great regard
for years of servitude and deeds
It was a happy time in my life
as a certain knight, my heart did find
although he never noticed me
still, I did not really mind
For I could dream of being with him
forever by his side
just to watch him in the courtyard
upon his white steed, he did ride
To look upon his noble face
as charming, as any knight could be
strong and brave donned in his armor
as he often rode past me
One day, while tending to my duties
readying for a costume ball
there was so much to prepare for
when I heard a beckoning call
Because I was the servant
of course I rushed right to the sound
and there I found this gallant knight
with garments strewn upon the ground
In frustration to dress for the ball
he knew not where to start
so with a silent giggle
and a smile upon my heart...
I gathered up his scattered clothes
rearranging them just right
showing him how they should be donned
and then bid him a kind good night
I was to the end of the darkened hall
when I heard that same mournful voice
calling out for me to return
I was sure I had no choice
I retraced my steps and asked m'Lord
what it was he needed done
replying he had no companion for the ball
would I accompany him to this one
Of course I was in no position
for I was but a mere commoner
and although the idea struck my fancy
I would have no elegant gown to wear
When I brought this to his attention
he produced a gown of golden threads and lace
and because it was a costume ball
no one would recognize my face
The offer was too good to resist
how could I not comply
this would be a dream of a lifetime
that just could not be denied
I held the gown up in my arms
as it were a child, so frail and young
returning, forthwith to my chamber
dressing for the ball at once
As I entered the castle's ballroom
the gallant knight did catch my eye
he asked me for the first dance
but instead, we danced into the night
Even though he knew just who I was
I believe, all along this was his plan
for now I am his Lady
and this gallant knight is now my man
~PennyLynne~
Author notes
ooops, sorry, another long one LOL :)
Written July 2nd, 2003
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another long one?!!!! With your poems.....they are never too long.....they aren't long enough. I loved it. And it had a happy ending. Your poems with these stories are so wonderfully written. You are such a great story teller in a poetic way. I love it very much. As I said long ago, your style is so masterfully done. You have a wonderful gift my friend. Thank you for sharing. ~Bud~
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Hi Rubee.
This done quiet beautifully.
Nice flow to the poem.
You can read it with the curiosity
of a child.
I like the simplicity.
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This much describes Carolyn and me. She is my lady so fair and I am her man, and that is the way we like it except when we are in an argument. Then we wish we were in different worlds completely, and in a way I guess that we are or we would not be aruing. I beautiful poem my friend, I loved it all and completely.
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Oh this is so lovely... I wanna be Cinderella too! that is what this reminds me of.. So enchanting. I really adore this one.
Beautiful and simple. I think I have already found my prince, for he has swept me off my feet and loves me beyond control.. He just needs a horse. hehehe
Look forward to more of your writes. Thanks for sharing.
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wow, this one got a lot of critiques..lol. it was lovely though, a five star piece...who cares if it's long? the quality of it is outstanding! keep on writing
marce
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It's just like a cinderella story. I loved the language used in this made this story feel all the more better. It has such a happy ending I tend to be a sucker for those, or the saddest of the sad. A really good write and the flow to this was supurb.
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Rubee
Incredibly Beautiful!!!!!!!! I love this, wonderful fairytale, you've brought to life I absolutely love these types of movies 
You always create mini-movies for me with your amazing writes
Hugs and Love
Karen/
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwww, this is SO sweet! Love it, love it, LOVE IT! This has a fantastic flow, excellent rhyming and the end gave me one of those "awww" chills. Whimsical, wonderful and so very well done. When I read a long piece twice, then you KNOW it's good!!!
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Rubee, this is so enchanting, a fantastic story. I can see her so clearly wow! I'm misses reading your poetry. I'm so glad to see you posting lately
This was well worth the wait I should say as well. What a beautiful story. sighs I'm still waiting for my prince to ask me to dance hehehe. Gods I love this hun. Blessed be
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this is antastic, you took me to another world, the ryming was great, it wasnt forced at all as you might expect from the lenght of the peice... well done.. this is a great piece of work
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Rhythm, rhyme, and story, perfectly woven together.
An elegant masterpiece.
Thank you, I really enjoyed this.
RR
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For I could dream of being with him
forever by his side
just to watch him in the courtyard
upon his white steed, he did ride
Loved that stanza, I loved this poem, keep writing
Josh -
I love the way this is a long poem, but you did not lose the quality all of the way through it. Great job.
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Myra...I thank you so so very much for coming back all the time to read my poetry, even tho I still haven't gotten to your work yet (you would not believe my life right now!!!!!! LOL) I promise to get to your pages the minute the coast is clear... for being such a sweet, dear, patient lady
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PurplePhoenix, I thank you so much for your visit and kind comment..it is very much appreciated, considering this is such a long poem, I appreciate your time and your kind words
awww Kathy my friend, your kind words warm my heart as always we gotta have our dreams..or at least stories of a dream to bring some light to our lives...thank you as always for continuously reading my work back at ya
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Excellent-enchanting-enjoyable
First of all I was surprised to see you had two new ones up LOL Wow! What a come back!!! This is beautiful, enchanting and I didn't even notice the length because your words held my attention. What a wonderful and magical tale. Gave me a little hope at least to dream of a gallant knight. A pleasure to read. Thank you
~Kathy -
so glad you liked this one Sherry...I hope you feel better now and that I've redeemed myself LOL..thank you so much for reading... I'll be by very soon to catch up on reading your work (life has been so hectic for me lately)...take care
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Penny, a fantastic love story nice and dreamy a wonderful piece:) Hugs to you,
Sherry
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Ah, dearest Poetess, for a short (long? NOPE) moment I was swept away by a fairytale with a "real" happy ending! This is the stuff for little girls - and old, lonely maids! - to dream about!
Thank you, Sweet Penny ... you've made me dream, too
Love,
Myra -
I ABSOLUTLEY LOVE the take on the cliche "knight in shining armour" and how you made it into a story. The background is enchanting as well - a perfect match to a perfect tale! I feel like a little girl reading a bedtime story after this!
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oh my gosh...what a wonderful review, and to be recommended by a reader...I'm truly honored.
MoonDragon, Odyssey, Moonlitmirror, thank you so very much for your kind and wonderful comments. They are so very much appreciated
I will come by to read some of your work too...again, thank you ever so kindly
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Awww omg that is sweet. A fairytale and a fairytale ending. Such a nice poem..moondragon told me about it and shes right its such a great poem. Excellently told...awesome write..keep it up that is just wonderful stuff there.
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH this is so good.
I love this kind of poem it is just unreal!!
Start, middle, end, plot - you've compressed an elaborate tale into a poem and I like reading / writing this kind of stuff. This really apeals to me...
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I LOVE IT!!! I love this sooo much.. AWESOME JOB! Exeptional write!! Omg I'm in love with this!! Sorry, lol its hard sometimes to find a poem that makes ur eyes as big as quarter. Keep it up!!!
Rock On
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