Buona Mattina by swanridur at All poetry

Sun streaked lids dreaming

Facade flushed with dew
Kisses salty tasting
A nectar unique to you.

Stillness, not a sound befalls
Synchronized symmetry
Only hypnotic rise and fall,
Ensuing actuality

Ascending perfect harmony.

Molded form entwining,
Cooling fingers trace
Heat rising, depleting
Dreams descending, erased.

Lashes flutter, sighing

Stillness falters, dying

Slumberless birds sing

Awakening soft yearning

Come sei bella...Ti amo

Author notes

subliminal love just before waking. Buana Mattina Bella! (good morning darling!) Last line translation
How beautiful you are.....I love you

A contest entry

Love. But it isn't that easy.... by DystopianDweller. 400 points, ended November 17, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
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i want to be you for a while. by Ryno. 575 points, ended March 8, 2008, 14 entries
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something by Nigeej. 300 points, ended March 15, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Love, does it really exist? by geckogirl. 850 points, ended May 12, 22 entries
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geckogirl
May 12
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I like the style... thanks so much for entering
Ryno
March 5, 2008
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May we have a translation of the last line please That'd be nice

I think the imagery was a little blunt and the emotion could've been stronger, but overall it is still a wonderfully beautifully write.

Love the rhyming in the second last stanza... really added to the flow.

Thanks for the entry.

Ryan
DystopianDweller
November 12, 2007

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What a lilting flow and great use of language. I love the ebb and flow of the whole piece. I can't find a real flaw at all. Thanks for the entry!
Under Construction
July 9, 2007
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!! No other words can express how I feel for this piece!
alemana
March 19, 2007

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Love..
Loved this imagery, could easily imagine myself in this scenario. The imagery so strong that I could smell the sent of the morning air....
Great write, it is nice to read something that transports you to another, dreamy place....
PalmettoSky
March 18, 2007

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sweet love!
you captured the essence of this emotion perfectly. great writing. thank you for sharing it. It rolled off the tongue as I read it...very nice indeed..
Stillness not a sound befalls
synchronized symmetry
only hypnotic rise and fall
ensuing actuality
ascending in perfect harmony.

this was my favorite stanza...i loved the extended use of vocabulary. peace and light, kp
- swanridur
  March 18, 2007
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  Thank you so much for your comment and applause. I really appreciate feedback and encouragement. Look forward to reading you. SR
Sukrit Raman
March 18, 2007

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Nice verse rhming.I love this poem and i hope it goes to the finalists's list and also win a prize.great poem and take care.
Sacrificial Love
March 18, 2007

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Beautiful...
I thought about and envisioned a couple lying in bed snuggled up under a sheet on a Summer morning... the window open...curtains lightly blowing in the breeze... so very peaceful and serene... this was definitely a pleasure to read...

best of luck to you in the contest...

xoxo Heidi
Whispering Wind
March 17, 2007

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This is very good and I love the style you used. Wakeing from a sweet slumber, still with the taste of love...Thank you so much for entering your master piece...
Fire N Ice
March 17, 2007
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Beautiful
Ive been here and its amazing!
- swanridur
  March 17, 2007
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  Thankyou tinker bell my lovely. It is rather nice if you're with 'the one' x