Tears are not to shed
And life means to look ahead.
So now I wont loose hopes against dread.
I have my wings to spread.
I hold the legacy
Of love and intimacy
Only for you.
You try to hold me down
For you've that invisible crown.
But let me tell you
When the time is mine
I can also shine
To swell your earth with the flood of light.
A contest entry
- *Break the Silence* by deleteit.
425 points, ended March 23, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i liked your title,first and foremost.clever.liked its tone.very empowering.good write
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3 Stars ***
And oh, I have always been a great fan of rhyming poems. It's not like I don't appreciate blank verses, but rhyming poetry makes it fun to read the write. But yes, the poem is ofcourse more than just rhyming.
I would have loved it if you would have written the reference to this poem, like what made you write it. It would have just helped me understand the situation when you wrote it. Quite a decent write, good way to present that you ARE strong and you ARE willing to go on and move ahead in life, ready to fight all the obstacles.
Take cares and have a nice time. Just keep it up. Your humble little friend. - Vic ( Who else? ) -
And life means to look ahead.
So now I wont loose hopes against dread.
I have my wings to spread.
I hold the legacy
Of love and intimacy
Only for you.
a good piece of poetry. -
Great flight and imagination in this poe. I love these lines, " When the time is mine
I can also shine
To swell your earth with the flood of light"
An excellent inspirational poem dear. Keep writing such wonderful poems. I would be happy, if you could stamp your views on my poems. -
Spreading wings to fly...The legacy of love and intimacy...I like it all. Taking control for the greater good of your life. Awesome. Thanks for entering and best of luck
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Thanks a lot for reading and commenting. I'm glad that u liked it.
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you know i love ur distinctive way to make a piece of writing rthmic......i love this one...alliteration specially.
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Thanks for loving that alliteration.
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you know i love ur distinctive way to make a piece of writing rthmic......i love this one...alliteration specially.
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