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"V" is for Vanity

As I take in the air of the cold, bitter night
I'm back in that all too familiar state
My whereabouts are unknown to your sight
And I'm afraid I cannot concentrate
The birds above me make way too much noise
Sounds like they're calling "save our sanity"
Flying over the girls and boys
Shaped like a "V" for vanity
If you're really determind to make me hurt
I'll show you all of the things I do
So sit up straight and be alert
As I re-enact my past to you

First I will ask you to drop your jaw
So I can shove all those insults back down your throat
I'll add a few needles as you stare in awe
For all of the words that you twist and misquote
I'm sorry that this isn't quite clean,
Though you're doing great, keep standing still
And I'll drench your body in kerosene
From what I spat out when you made me ill,
When you turned me into a nasty joke,
Your favorite plastic "beat-me-up" toy
Surprisingly you don't cough or choke
In fact, you just smile and fill with joy

Now get yourself ready and listen to this---
It's my tortured tape-recorded screams
Not a second of sorrow that you'll want to miss
You could replay the tape forever it seems
Are you just adding those stripes to your wrists,
To win you the title of "most defeated"?
If I show you the truth, then you'll show me your fist
I swear I didn't hurt you, you're self-mistreated
You would think from your hatred, you'd want me away
But you tell me you love it, you tell me to stay
It's fun in the most complicated of ways
A game that only worst enemies play

I wonder what happens if I quit the game,
With no one to play with, what would you do?
And yes, I'm aware that you feel the same
Because I've made you think that you're worthless too
Are you looking for a happy ending,
Or a cheap excuse for you not to be sane?
If I judge by the messages you're sending,
Looks like you just want to make love to my pain
So walk up and down this sad path that you chose
As you cast away your sanity
With pride in your weakness, strike your favorite pose---
The shape of a "V" for vanity.

Author notes

November 25, 2006... I used to be in a HUGE fight with this girl who was beyond addicted to me. She used to call me and tell me she was thinking about me and what I did to her all day and how she was hurting herself and doing hard drugs just to get me out of her mind. Then she would tell me all this shit I didn't want to hear and talk about how she was planning to kill me. I'm serious. She had a "Ways to kill Amanda" list. She would go on and on in extreme detail about what she was doing with the liar I used to be in love with who had fallen off the face of the earth. She was the most sadistic person I had ever met. Literally, the only thing that made her happy was seeing me break down. She loved all the sympathy she was getting too. Fighting with me became an obsession. She LOVED every part of it. I wrote the begining of this poem when we were in the back-and-forth fighting stage, and the rest when I decided to leave her alone. Just as I thought, she continued to try and torture me. I continued to ignore her... She went nuts and got put in a pshycward, (so did I, but for different reasons and I got out sooner).... to this day she still isn't over it.

#3 - A time in your life that you knew someone vain

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  • Ashleigh London
    December 26, 2007

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    Congrats on the gold and the three honorable mention trophies. This was a very intense entry full of much emotion and fantastic imagery. Thank you for the magical read of a sin! And good luck!

  • killmenowplease
    December 10, 2007

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    Wow, this sounds a lot like a friend of mine,
    he went through the same thing, so i can really relate.

    Thanks for entering the contest,

    Godd Luck

  • TheDemonEve
    October 23, 2007

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    You are very, very talented. This flows so well, and the word choice is the definition of flawless. Very well done!!!!!

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!

  • LadysDragon
    August 11, 2007
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    Fantastic,and very good,thank you and good luck!

  • ApatheticDeviant
    July 16, 2007
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    ooh my god this poem was fantastic i just loved it in soo many ways...good luck

  • Beautiful Mistake
    July 16, 2007
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    Thanks for changing that. I really like this poem. the imagery is great. I love the second stanza.. so much description.. i felt like i was watching you do all this and just seeing this person smile... Ending of the first stanza great to with the birds.. so clever. Thanks for entering and best of luck!

    }{aley

  • Beautiful Mistake
    July 16, 2007

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    I was just checking your authors box.. and I realized you didn't read my rules.. (or you didn't care enough to listen to me) so here it is, the Magical dissapearing act! fix it up and re-enter if you want.. READ MY RULES.

  • ibsons hysops
    June 5, 2007
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    i like

  • deranged killer
    May 26, 2007
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    as art i loved this peace thank you for entering and best of luck in this contest

  • Shadows-stars
    May 11, 2007

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    I really like the first stanza of this poem, it is very well written and great imagery.. I especially like... "Flying over the girls and boys, Shaped like a "V" for vanity" great imagery in that line....
    the second stanza sort of threw me a bit, some of the lines are a bit awkward to read and throw the flow off a bit, but however the rest of poem continues with great imagery and full of raw emotion, so much hate and anger...well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always.

  • ZzBrokenHopezZ
    April 28, 2007

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    Wow,...

    I am kinda scared but I reALLY like this poem!
    "Sounds like they're calling "save our sanity"
    Flying over the girls and boys
    Shaped like a "V" for vanity"
    I love this part! Great job with this poem and I hope you stay away from crazy girls! lol
  • whitelies
    April 27, 2007
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    Well said

  • worthless13
    April 25, 2007
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    wow i dont no wat to say but thats really good

  • C.c
    April 25, 2007
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    i loved your poem.

  • ggirll90
    April 23, 2007
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    this is a rly good write. keep up the good work.

  • deranged killer
    April 22, 2007

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    () beautiful worklonger than what i usaly read i read your nontes first so i had to read it all great work and i can fell how you do in this one thank you for enering and good luck in my contest


  • Heavens Child
    April 21, 2007

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    Holy shit this is an intense write. You've done a phenomenal job with this. A display of dark talent. Thank you for the entry in my contest.

  • Disturbed Prodigy
    April 18, 2007

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    What that heck, you know it is dark when you get someone to say that, i mean really you did something, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

  • The Void
    April 17, 2007

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    Such powerful darknes in such a poem, you have a nack for this and great write. thanks for entering .

  • Yasmini gold member
    April 14, 2007

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    dark perfection

    wow, powerful and darkness at the same time. the imagery and flow is flawless.. i can tell this contest will be hard to judge.. good luck in my contest..


    red roses


  • Lady Lust
    April 14, 2007
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    perfect!

    i like this poem alot.very nice.thats what i like to see.good luck in the contest.


  • Starz.Still.Shine
    April 13, 2007

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    oh wow this was a really great write..i really enjoyed reading this..your words were powerful and emotional and i really liked the ending keep writitng your very talented

    xXTashaXx

  • wanderingstarlet
    April 12, 2007

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    wow, i really liked this. reminds me of how much i fight with people who fight with me, but i always tend to win those. sometimes it's just a matter of words. thanx for entering!!!

  • Xsafety glassX
    April 10, 2007

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    i cant say with words how AWESOME this poem is without writing awesome over 300 times...but i wont to save u the agony of reading them all...this wuz the BEST poem EVER!!! i luv it!!! thanx for entering my contest!

  • XHollowXEyesX
    April 8, 2007

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    wow this is a very powerful write. there is so much emotion and strong hate for this person. I especially love the lines
    'I'm sorry that this isn't quite clean,
    Though you're doing great, keep standing still
    And I'll drench your body in kerosene'

    'It's my tortured tape-recorded screams'

    'It's fun in the most complicated of ways
    A game that only worst enemies play'

    they are my favourite.
    thanks for entering and goodluk

  • BarbedWireButterfly
    March 18, 2007

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    nice write but der b no option number!!!!! nooooooooooooo. plz put one, i wanna keep this poem in da contest. very nice write, full of emotion and gr8 language, thnx for entering and good luck
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