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colored me too green.

green--
like my face
after I break the lock
on the refrigerator.


green-
like my hands
when I hear you speak
her name;


later to turn red-


green,
like the paint
you used to create me;

but couldn't erase
when I bled through the paper
and into your hands.




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Author notes

the first aspect of green is like sickness-

throwing up.[mia-ish]
2nd- jealousy ... -"caught red-handed"
3rd- created by paint, can't be erased, and I went outside the lines...

yeah, it's a bit different than my normal, so.. sorry if you don't like it hun!

dq all you want

♥ you.

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  • petrichor
    March 23, 2007

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    wow.

    'but couldn't erase
    when I bled through the paper
    and into your hands.'

    i've never read anything like it. seriously makes me think 'damn! I should have thought of that.'

    i think it was a lovely and unique response to the word green, and i really really like it.
    <33


  • sweetpearl
    March 17, 2007

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    The beginning reminds me of a glutton, actually.

    "couldn't erase
    when I bled through the paper
    and into your hands"

    --this ending was fucking awesome. That's all I can say about that.


  • Hell In Harmony
    March 17, 2007

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    I really have an urge
    To paste all my favorite lines in here
    [but the entire poem might end up in my comments]
    I just realised, I dont care!:

    green--
    like my face
    after I break the lock
    on the refrigerator.


    green-
    like my hands
    when I hear you speak
    her name;


    later to turn red-

    The images racing through my mind
    right now are insanee
    This is truly inspiring.
    And the ending
    [becuase im a sucker for endings]
    Was great in every
    sense!:


    green,
    like the paint
    you used to create me;

    but couldn't erase
    when I bled through the paper
    and into your hands.


    thank youuu
    GOodluck
    Kat

  • She Stole My Voice
    March 17, 2007

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    Ohh wow.
    Bookmarking this one.

    I really like it babes.

    I think you should win

    ♥

    ~Princess of Shadows~

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