Pure love flowing from above,
Above from His throne,
From His throne to His very own,
His own for whom He came,
Came into this world lived a holy life and died,
Died and rose again,
Again He to His Father in heaven went,
Went from the earth to His home,
Home where I'm going to go,
Going to spend eternity there,
For there He's prepared a place,
A place for all who believe,
Believe that He is the Son of God,
God sent Him for you and me to sacrifice His life,
His life He sacrificed and washed away all our sins,
We're sinless now and have been redeemed,
Redeemed from eternal suffering if we believe In Him.
Author notes
This is the first wreath that I've written.Hope you guys like it.
A contest entry
- Write a Wreath by ea.
360 points, ended March 20, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice work!
Really like the form in which it is written...gives the whole piece an amazing flow. Timeless message as well!!
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Hey man.Great job here.I really liked the spiritual outlook and how you showed dat da ppl who believe in God will surely attain peace and enter his sanctuary
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I loved this. So amazing and so true. Really wonderful. You wrote it so well too. Keep on writing. God Bless!
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I really enjoyed this piece. I've never seen a "wreath" before, I really like what you have done with it.
The repeats from the end of one line to the start of the next, give a continuity and flow that is lovely. Only break in the pattern is end of line 15 to start of line 16, though you continue with the meaning begun in the previous line. Line 17, I think it's spelled "believe".
Very nice!
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Oops, I'm sorry for that mistake..Thanks for the comment and the applause..
God Bless You,
Josh
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I thought I read this...I love the way you interlock the end and beginning together. Awesome piece of poetry. I love it!!
Sam
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Loved this it was really amazing.
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I'm not familiar with this form but it sounds marvellous to me ... xx
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Impressive
Braided truth indeed!!!
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I believe line 14 should be "sent". Thank you for this spiritual and heartfelt entry. The wreath lends itself well to your theme as it reminds me of the crown of thorns. Maybe it would be nice to mention that.
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I really like this, you did a great job on it!
'His life He sacrificed and washed away all our sins,'
I really like that line!
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