Candy so sweet,
It melts on your tongue.
Oh candy so sweet,
It makes you feel young.
A sugar so addictive,
The parents says restrictive.
Twirl and whirl in the gumdrops,
Eat it Eat it NONSTOP!
"WEEEE!"Goes the child,
This sugar high isn't mild!
Eat more! Eat more!
Your sugar high will only soar!
Recess and Twix,
Oh what a sugary mix.
Keep on eating
To this sugary greeting!
Candy so sweet,
It melts on your tongue.
Oh candy so sweet,
It makes you feel young.
A contest entry
- Candy-Licious!! by Phoenix-Flame.
320 points, ended March 30, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excelling- Greatness
I know i have already commented this but it was good and it still makes me yearn for that sweet sweet candylicous candy!!! haha. good job like i said before and keep up the good work.
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Great business for dentists.!!
Well, it certainly looks like you have a sweet tooth.. that's for sure. I like the happy go lucky feeling that one gets while reading and as a smile forms on the face the end arrives, but like the sweet candy, the smile and the happy atmosphere lingers on. Think I'll go out and buy some too. Well done.
Bazza (Barry) -
I think you did a great job with this very delicious entry for the contest. Well done and good luck. excellent!
Shaz xx
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WOWZERR!!!!!!!!!!!
haha. forget the made up word right there. this poem is good and i really enjoyed reading it. this is gonna be one of my tops. but there is one thing i caught about this..............IT RYHMED!!!!!!!!!! i like reading free verse but it all seems a bunch of mess. rhyiming is alot better. good job and keep the ink flowing. haha
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