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Three little words

My knees start to weaken
At the first sight of your face
My heart starts to melt
At the thought of your embrace

Your love flows through me
Like a river flows down its path
Your kiss lifts me up so high
I could probably fall to my death

I really wish that
When I looked into your eyes I could see
Exactly how it is that
You feel about me

I get nervous when you're around me
I feel I could cry when you're away
I dream about you
Every night and day

I want you to know
My last three words will always remain true
Regardless of what I may say or do
You'll always know that
I love you.

Author notes

This poem is for the love of my life...To let him know that I will always love him.. and how i really feel about him,my future husband..

Happy Birthday

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  • Raven Judge
    June 2, 2007

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    Not to be flippant, but my first reaction when the page loaded for this poem was to think; "wow... maybe that idea about having no rules against formatting wasn't so great after all." lol.. the pink and green combination hurt my eyes so much I had to read the piece highlighted.

    After having read it and looking at the three gold trophies it has won, I was impressed by the recognition it has received. More impressive is that the type of contests it has taken the gold in have been mostly general entry... thats a tough playing field for any writing.

    Give the rather ordinary feel of the poem, I have to chalk up your success to the distinct and undeniable mastery of flow apparent in the work. Your words flow and bob along in the fashion of a (oxymoron warning) serious pop song, and consequently give the piece more bite than it would otherwise have.

    This is a notable observation as I never considered how we may, in the process of adjudicating this contest, find genius in *way* words were written rather than in the words themselves. A final frontier for poetry, perhaps.

    I can certainly appreciate this piece for how it has opened my eyes to the reality that I will have keep alert to the many different ways intelligence may present in this contest

    Thanks for you entry, it has made me a better judge.

    ~Das

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    May 31, 2007

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    This is a very sweet poem I think the same way about my partner. Love is an amazing gift. very nice write xxxx


  • BurnBrandMemory
    April 30, 2007
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    this was so cute, good job.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    April 26, 2007
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    a wonderful poem
    well deserved for the trophies
    well written
    and full of emotions
    well done


  • meanderingbear
    April 22, 2007

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    Beautiful!

    What a lovely poem, straight from the heart! Congratulations on winning the gold trophy...you certainly are deserving!


  • sweethelper
    April 22, 2007

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    SUPERB

    i loved it !! truely amazing !! i could relate to it , each and every line !!

    anyways congrats on the win !!

    your well wisher ,
    -truthwriter-


  • debilynn gold member
    April 13, 2007

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    great write here. i enjoyed reading this. you did a great job. keep writing. God bless you always


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    April 13, 2007

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    Another beautiful poem thank you for your entry and helping me Finalize my " BIRTHDAY GOLD " contest all the other entries are in and I will be Judging it tonight Good Luck


  • -Ink Artist-
    April 10, 2007

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    Ah, the way love speaks through poetry is touching. The object of your affection is a lucky guy to have such wonderful words written for him. Lovely piece. Thanks for your entry!

    ~Lori


  • James L Williams
    March 17, 2007

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    Great Poem

    This is a great poem. I am definatly entering it into my top 3. Great Write. This is a very heart felt poem and to be honest those are my favorite.

    Luke


  • my-angle
    March 17, 2007
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    grate

    I love thia poem it is really good. I am going to send this to my boyfriends because thia is what I tell him all the time and you worded it perfect that way he can always see what I mean. good job keep up the good work

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