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Love is more

Love is more than than a lovers embrace,
than the passion I feel when you touch my face,
more than a sweet taste of your soft lips,
a power that holds in eclipse.

Love is knowing my deepest desires,
seeing me, through my clouded disguise,
and beyond my lost, teary eyes,
true love is something that never expires.

Two souls coming together as one,

with a love that comes second to none,

love at it's fullest, at it's best and worst,

true love has been found, so you come first.
Love is more than passion and desire,
it's more than two body's burning like fire,
more than a kiss or a lovers embrace,
more than the feeling when you touch my face.
It is knowing my dreams and deepest desires,
true love is something that never expires.

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Option:- 1

Option 3 -- Lol... I read the rules

Option 4. Tell me about what you think love is.

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  • live in love
    October 9, 2007

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    nice!

    i like it a lot it has a beautifull rhythem and is written very wonderfully the best of luck to you
    thanks for entering
    lil


  • willowprincess
    May 14, 2007

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    you've definitely shown the difference between lust and love here. i think you've defintely shown what love truly is. great job and good luck.

  • danigirl1940
    May 2, 2007

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    i really like this...my favorite line is "true love is something that never expires"
    thanks for entering
    keep writting
    dan


  • Glendolien Adanya
    April 18, 2007
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    i love the way you ended this peom and the whole thing was deep and just lovely


  • Hearts.That.Bleed
    April 9, 2007
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    Breathtaking!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    March 22, 2007

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    I congratulate you on a marvelous piece, well written, and displaying all the things that mean 'true love'. A very well deserved Gold. Thanks for allowing us to share this.


  • Autumns Soul
    March 21, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem...Thank you very much for entering and the best of luck to you in both contests


  • Seltz
    March 20, 2007

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    WOW WHAT A BEAUTIFUL POEM,THIS IS SO TRUE LOVE IS ALL THOSE THINGS AT ONCE AND YOU CAPTURED EVERYTHING THAT LOVE IS!!!! WELL DONE
    Love is knowing my deepest desires,
    seeing me, through my clouded disguise,
    and beyond my lost, teary eyes,
    true love is something that never expires.
    Two souls coming together as one,
    with a love that comes second to none,
    love at it's fullest, at it's best and worst,
    true love has been found, so you come first.




  • Angel by Moonlight
    March 18, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Wonderfully written! A very true poem about love, it is definatly more than what is on the surface. Beautiful write and keep up the good work. ~Angel

  • PalmettoSky
    March 18, 2007

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    I think you have hit the nail on the head here. i honestly think that your insight is incredible. this poem will resound with many. i am glad i read it. keep up the great work. peace always in all ways.


  • SoS
    March 18, 2007

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    First reactions- You started the poem nicely, but maybe consider instead of, in the first four lines, keep dragging it on? Why not try after the line "......you touch my face" puting a period and starting the next line as a new thought? I think it would help the flow.

    Same thing goes, in my opinion for line 9. WHy not have lines 9 & 10, period, then next thought?

    Next idea, maybe, in my opinion, I think the reader would find it more relaxing to read if there was some form of stanza/orginization. Just a thought.

    You conveyed your feelings into this poem well, and the rhyme scheme was steady and not forced at all. At least that's what it looks like. If it was forced, you did a good job of covering it up

    Good work here =)


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 17, 2007

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    It is knowing my dreams and deepest desires,
    true love is something that never expires...

    I do agree with you here,your are just revealing here the universal term of the love my friend...I understand here the heart of yours which is playing here a role of the a sensitive poet and poet is always very near to the beauty of life and this is a
    capital which you enjoy and share with us in very beautiful themes as it is one here...this is a very glittering work...


  • poetsruletheworld
    March 17, 2007

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    "true love is something that never expires" breathtaking, whata wonderful write and an exquisite description of an emotion that is almost impossible to describe.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    March 17, 2007

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    WOW! this is very good,you are so right true love never expires and it does know our deepest desires.Thank you so much for entering and sharing this beautiful piece.

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