It's not ours to question why
such horrid things occur
but together we will cry
tears that seem so pure
because when life gets you down
you land upon your friends
when you get turned around
they're the angels that God Sends
So lean on us We can take it
don't worry we still know your strong
Lean on us so you can make it
don't worry we've been here all along
We don't ask pesky questions
the whys, the hows, the whos
we don't give pointless suggestions
and offer to pay your dues
We know that you can take it
but we're helping anyway
we can be a crutch, don't worry you won't break it
because we're here to stay
So lean on us We can take it
don't worry we still know your strong
Lean on us so you can make it
don't worry we've been here all along
When your life gets normal
and you get back up on your feet
don't worry about being formal
no need to be discreet
give us our hugs and kisses
and we'll give them in return
because a friendship never misses
as soon as you learn
to lean on us We can take it
don't worry we still know your strong
Lean on us so you can make it
don't worry we've been here all along
Author notes
My prayers go out to you catz, the friend i haven't met yet.
In a list
A contest entry
- Caring Thoughts For catz by -LilacThOughts-.
1000 points, ended April 4, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is so very sweet and precious. It reminds almost of us a song. You've done great. The best of luck to you in the contest!
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Excellent penning...
Thank you for this very caring and thoughtful write, or should I say lyrics? ...because they come over to the reader so tunefully...I can see that catz loved it too, it must have been comforting to read your kind words...
You truly have covered what real friends are about, because although we are all invisible to one another here on the internet, bonds are made and friendships formed, we can all still be there for one another...
I like the repeated stanzas, I have read them many times over and feel they are the strength of this poem...thank you for this wonderful entry, and although we have already discussed this personally through IM's, I have to remind you again that it is over the 20 lines maximum asked for in the rules...none the less this is a great gift to catz and Sal, thank you very much...~Lilac~
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Thank you very much for your entry, it is a welcomed contribution to the contest...
Comments will be given at the time of judging...
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This is an awesome write and it is true that we need our friends to get through tough times. Normally our parents try to help more than the should and that is when we need our friends. This write really struck me and is making me think about a lot of things like how much my friends mean to me. Really I love this write because it speaks volumes in its words. But one thing i did notice and i am not sure if you wanted like that but not every other line rhymes. I don't know if it supposed to or not. It flows well if you don't rhyme them but just wanted to point that out.
Keep Writing Big Bro
God Bless
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this would be cool if it wasn't so religious and... Internet.
Maybe put some periods in there, maybe cut it down to like 5 lines, or maybe take like 60 of the cliches and burn them then rocket the ashes out into space and hope no aliens ever find them because god when I read 'pay your dues' I puke in my mouth a little bit. -
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thanks for your comment. i dont hold much use for grammer, takes too much time and blocks the creative juices. especialy in poetry. cliche's are cliche's for a reason, there true lol,and i am a very religous person. im sorry i made you puke, but maybe thats a fault of you and not me
Thanks for the comment and God Bless
The Unrequited Writer
Ben B.
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Thank you so much for such a wonderful thoughtful poem, Unrequited Writer this is beautiful. I'm reading each of these poems and the comments to Sal on the phone... He sends his thanks, too. I've left an update on the contest comments if you want to read it.
I just arrived home from the hospital and found this wonderful contest going. Thank you so much for participating. This whole thing is sure cheering me up
love and
Dee
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