A FORGOTTEN SOUND
A FORGOTTEN PERSON
A DISTANT MEMORY
INVISIBLE TO THE NAKED EYE
ALONE IN THE WORLD
ALWAYS ALONE
AND ALWAYS DESTINED TO BE ALONE
NO ONE UNDERSTANDS ME
NO ONE HAS FELT MY PAIN
NO ONE IS ME
AND NO ONE SHALL EVER BE ME
Please tell me what you think
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You make me feel for you. I think we've all felt alone at some point in our lives, just know that it won't last forever. There will come a time when the lonliness is broken and feelings of hope will come again. You will never be defeated if you wait long enough because no one can stop time.
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Sounds like you are going through some tough times; and this is true - no one shall ever be you, but there are those who sometimes go through this with you, family close friends, who can understand and help if you ask them too. Wish you a brighter outlook soon. Easy to read and understand the sentiments you express in these lines. Keep writing - a good way to get rid of stress and pent up anger.
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yeah well i bet people have gone threw stuff like you have but its true no one is you and i like that you put that in there. good stuff
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Very nice write. The emotion is very clearly seen and felt. Angsty and heartfelt. Thanks for sharing. Many people are able to relate, it's kept on quite a broad spectrum like that. Nothing terribly original about it, but the power behind the words is enough to make up for it.
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great poem. to be so short you really drive home your point. thank you for sharing. please check out my poem "we all bleed" let me know what you think....
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That was amazing.The first verse was good and you are right,ya no 1 is you and it is painful about this memory.
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Short, and to the point. Everybody has at one time or another felt this way, whether or not it's true. I totally understand the feeling. It's a surprisingly cmmon feeling in today's youth... mainly teenagers. Congrats... and I hope you find that someone who will be your confidant/shoulder/strength/friend.
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I Love it!! I don't know what else to say, but I understand what you mean.
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VERY GOOD
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Alot of people can relate, especially us teenagers. M
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very nicely done. who hasn't felt this way before? I think the appeal of this poem is that it weaves a common thread that others will easily be able to relate to. keep up the great work. thanks for sharing. peace & Light, Kendal
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simple and superb.
simple and superb.
forgetfull ness some times act as a bane,but many a time will be a boon.
a nice poem with suitable words to raste the theme
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