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Spinnin' the wheel with Dame Fortuna

Waking up with nothing
Ending each day the same
Bet it all on life
But never will again

All too many years ago
The Dame, she slapped me double
Once for luck the other spite
Both to plunge me into trouble

Took too much within my life
Never once did I give back
The going price was mine to set
Destiny’s morals I did attack

Promises whispered under breath
With no intention at all to keep
A heart growing colder and blacker still
With every drifting off to sleep

A moment lost was hesitation's fee
And the fate fell out of my days
The spin of the wheel, the roll of the dice
It was taken all away

 

Waking up with nothing
Ending each day the same
Bet it all on life
But never will again

Author notes

Sometimes I know what I write about, other times, I don't... this is an 'other time'.
Fortuna - the Roman Goddess of Luck and Fate.

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  • Nam
    April 4

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    The second to last verse seemed less than the other verses and I felt it could be tightened up a bit. Other than that: I really quite enjoyed reading this poem.

    -Nam

  • carole21
    October 25, 2007

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    won out

    waking up is winning out here . . I like the repetition of the first and last stanza . . " a heart growing colder" is revealing but living instead is a victory . . so spinning the wheel was not so unlucky after all . . nice job !!


  • TanyaB
    March 21, 2007

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    "And the fate fell out of my days"
    Very intriguing line, really stood out for me.

    I could see this as a song, with the "Waking up...will again" part as the chorus. Maybe a Melissa Etheridge kinda song, or some other female with a strong, gritty voice? I dunno...


    • Barbara gold member
      March 21, 2007
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      I thought about Jann Arden, but.. her voice is too soft... she does a kick ass job on a "You're So Vain" remake, though.... Carly Simon could sing this one! (and she happens to be my daughter's favorite singer).


  • wattle silver member
    March 17, 2007

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    I like. Ms Barbara you have done well today. Thank you. )

    • Barbara gold member
      March 17, 2007

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      Thank you, thank you. It's such a plesure to have a comment from ya!

      You are so right! That should have been a 'd'.


  • Kari gold member
    March 16, 2007

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    Oh this is wonderful!! I loved it. Very well done. I hope that you write more like this It is so filled with personal emotions that it almost stings!!

    • Barbara gold member
      March 17, 2007
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      Why, thank you. This was #3 in the lyrics I was writing for my brother-in-law. I don't think they're his kind though, since his band is more of a Metallica/Nirvana mix.

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