Red is for anger; the blood that's been spilled,
Orange is for lament; the aching that's killed.
Yellow is for sanity; and being alone,
Green is for vigor; my emotion shown.
Blue is for regret; deciet from the start,
Purple is for bravery; betrayal at heart.
Brown is for humble; secrets held back,
White is for nightmares; comprehension I lack.
Silver is for intruge; as I was told his past,
Gold is for the truth; something that will never last.
Grey is for deeping sadness and uncovering what's true,
Black is for the hate in my heart, and chasing rainbows of you.
A contest entry
- ANYTHING! Seriously ANYTHING! by A Murderous Lament.
390 points, ended April 2, 2007, 75 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Groovy Write!
I love the dark touch that you added to this, that colors aren't all crayon boaxes and gardens that these colors actually can mean much much more! Thank you for sharing that image of colors. I enjoyed it!
Yellow is for sanity; and being alone,
Green is for vigor; my emotion shown.
Blue is for regret; deciet from the start,
I like it! It spoke to me!
Namaste'
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I like the flow of your thoughts in this write. Excellent. Thank you for entering my contest
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wow every color has something to it huh.
pretty good!!!
good luck in the contest!!!!
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Very Very nice !
Well done. I like the use of colours. -
Very nice... again, as spacing of this sort usually does, i found the format you fitted your poem into a little bit annoying, but other than that, i found this poem very interesting. I'm glad that, upon stumbling onto my contest, you did not choose a prewrite that had seen some two dozen contests previously (loosing every one of them) as those tend to annoy me.
The moods you chose to assign to each of the colors named was interesting, and though this poem was a little shorter than is the norm for my tastes, i still found it interesting. I thought you did a great job of expressing the emotions being the poem, and my only nitpick is that i really would have enjoyed seeing a little bit more rhythm invested in this peice (it can be challenging, i know, but for any poet capable of coming up with something like this, i should think it would be one gladly accepted and one admirably met!) Keep writing, and thanks for entering my contest! -
i would like to congratulate you on the bronze trophy you have earned in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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Sweet.
I love the style it's a amazing poem. I can see most of the colors when you describe it. A few I don't see but it's in your mind not mine. Great job. -Adds to finalists-
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lol i like this, i mean this is creative i mean that you did a great job, keep it flowing and good luck in
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Wow. This poem is really awsome. A personal favorite. I thought the rhyming was brilliant and the flow was excellent. I like how you used colors to describe a feeling or act. This poem is just down right great!
Megan
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