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The Inner Strength

"just to let you know, to get the whole meaning and understanding of this poem you have to read it carefully and understand it and i promise you that if you do that.. you'll enjoy it"

the outside is scary
the inside is calm
the air outside is breathable
the air inside is deadly
the love inside is bearable
the love outside is gone
what do you choose
when one place is perfect but
you'll die a horrific death in 1 year
and
one place is discriminating but
you'll live up to 60 years
what do you choose
when you have 2 choices
death or life
a perfect life with death so soon
ot a bad life where you'll live
for a long time
sometimes choices have to be made
even if its difficult
sometimes people have to choose
even if its the worst
sometimes people have to give a little
to get alot
sometimes lifes not worth living
and sometimes
its worth alot

Author notes

i dont really like how i repeat the 'alot' in the ending.. any advice?

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  • in-the-twilight
    March 19, 2007
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    Well first you can always get rid of the a lot in the end line and write "it" or something along those lines... possibly! See what else others say... Great write... really deep! Definately enjoyed it! Rock oN! xoxo Meg