Will you step a little nearer.
said the doughnut to the bun.
There’s a custard slice behind us,
and she seems to think it’s fun,
to eat up all the cup-cakes.
She’s already swallowed three.
Now she’s getting closer.
I think she’s after me.
She’s just nibbled at the shortbread.
Don’t let her see you stare.
Whoops – I don’t believe it.
There goes a cream éclair.
She really is quite greedy,
and what’s more, I’ve told her that.
You'd think she’d realise by now,
that cakes will make her fat.
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A contest entry
- Red Nose Day - Poems For Comic Relief by Death of the Author.
610 points, ended March 27, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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600 points, ended April 5, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
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424 points, ended July 16, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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800 points, ended May 18, 2007, 141 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Funny good or bad by cali951.
300 points, ended May 18, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Insane? or just nervous? by Death4Hire13.
390 points, ended June 7, 2007, 34 entries
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900 points, ended October 16, 2007, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Humor (Quickie) by Meroza.
650 points, ended August 31, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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LOL!!! I love it, no doubt, good luck to you :-)
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This is a funny one, made me giggle. Also the photo goes so well with the poem.
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LOL. This is so adorable and just perfect to cheer up my AP daughter. Good luck in the contest.
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Nice! Worthy of one of the top placings.
Congratulations on your placing.
Thank you for sharing.
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Awww this is freakin awesome.
Love it.
So funny. Really made me laugh.
Good work.
Good luck.
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What fun! Congratulations on your win. This was just great.cq
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Thank you for your kind comments. Much appreciated
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Nice rhythm. This piece flowed well, and it made me laugh. Good luck!
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HAH! that blasted custard slice get 'em buggers every time. poor cupcakes must have a complex about the whole thing, if there's any left that is. I als thought the rhyme felt natural for the most. Keep up the good writing!!
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This is funny in the weridest way good luck and good job in my contest.
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you have a way with words, Rhyme works well for you and this poem put a smile on my face. Great poem, Good luck in the contest.
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I have just read The Worried Doughnut...how very funny and cute. Vivid too, I could see this whole scene taking place as I read. Congrats on the gold, you deserve it, for such a pleasantly comical write.
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I found this warmly entertaining... I can just imagine a doughnut and a bun having this conversation about what horrors lie within the gaping mouth of another Hella funny, but quite cool if you ask me... Nice rhyme.
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Good job. I like it. I was laughing, alot! Great job, and you're going to the finalists! Thanks for entering my contest. Great job and I hope you keep writing!
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Aww sorry I can't see the picture, but I loved the poem. The thought of a paranoid doughnut, and a canibal cake eater! That's enough to make anyone laugh! Keep writing, Meggh xxxxxxxxxxxx
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Lol thank you, a great write had me smiling all the way, and it even has a message in about greed! Like us in the west...compared to the poorer countries which Comic Relief tries to help. Thank you for entering, take care x good luck! x
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Too Funny
Woo Hoo, another great one from you. I love it. Good luck in the contest
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