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[ I loved her ]

I loved her
I left her
She needed someone
It wasn't me
We tried to work it out
She was so unhappy
I loved her so much
I left for her
I ran as far as i could
So she could be happy
I didn't want to go
But it was killing her
To see me around
Now it's killing me
Not seeing her
I wish I could
If only for a moment
I would tell her
I missed her
I would tell her
I left so she could start over again
I hear she has someone new
I hope they are happy
I hope she's happy
I want her to feel the love
I once felt for her

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I miss her

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  • Jaffa-
    September 5, 2008
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    This is beautifully written.
    So easy to relate to.
    Great write.
    Well done.
    xoxo


  • swim.x
    July 20, 2008
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    It's such a problematic poem yet lovely.

    You were my cure,
    I was your disease.
    While I was killing you,
    You were saving me.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    lovely poem

    when one has no desire to stay when it is not within her heart, i am sure it hurts you...thank you for this entry
    Lin


  • DarknessOfSanity
    July 2, 2008

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    OMG

    You make it so easy to relate! It's so sad, and so beautiful! I almost cried -really! It was absolutely well done, and I just really...liked it! Fantastic job! Thanks for entering -good luck!


  • kel dog
    June 29, 2008

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    this is so good. i love it. missing some one is so hard. i cant imagine living without someone that means so much to me.


  • Mary Jane.
    June 21, 2008

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    It's a sad, but true poem. Full of emotion, an emotion I have felt. It hurts so much that you cause them so much pain and all you want was to see them happy.
    Thanks for entering and good luck
    Sarah


  • PonyPride
    June 20, 2008

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    wow this was beautiful.. it made my heart stop for a second there.. I would not change a thing. Great work and I will be adding this to the finalist list.. maybechange the backround tho.... idk it just throws off the mood


  • JustFallingApart
    June 16, 2008
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    heartbreak poems arn't usualy my thing, but it was a decent write

  • wendymolly
    May 31, 2008

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    This has to be one of those poems that for me, seems so perfect in every way. Your thoughts make the reader want to read and read again. Thoughts that really incorporate deeper meanings! Your a finalist!
    Take care,
    ~pithyAplomb.


  • Heartbeatsxfading
    June 3, 2007

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    Simple

    I like this poem but it was a little simple and easy going. It really didn't grab me.
    Good luck.
    ♥ Surrender ♥


  • neenabean
    April 17, 2007
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    stunned

    this poem is ............. beautiful. thanks and good luck


  • DareU2Byourself
    March 22, 2007

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    Nice job. I have no doubt that you deserved gold in the "The Silence of Love" contest, at least. This is beautifully sad. Great write. Thanks for sharing.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 18, 2007

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    Apostrophes needed: wasn't, didn't, it's, she's. Will make it easier to read when you have them in. Liked the poem...


    • SomethingPoetic
      March 18, 2007
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      thanks i was so tired when i read this lol i completely missed all of that


  • lucy sky-diamond
    March 18, 2007

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    this is a truly wonderful poem, pure and full of emotion. congratulations on your gold trophy
    lucy

    • SomethingPoetic
      March 18, 2007
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      thank you i know im so proud i havent won anything so far at it feels so good to have one under my bellt makes me feel alittle better abot myself

  • grannyeri gold member
    March 17, 2007
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    Thought this was just what was wanted in the contest. A few words need apostrophes, and if added that would make this an excellent poem. Thanks for entering. Sad but this shows love in the fullest form - giving her up so she can find true love.

    • SomethingPoetic
      March 18, 2007
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      sorry for my ignorance but where do i need the apostrophes? im sorry if i sound stupid i just cant find them lol


  • Poet of Dreams
    March 17, 2007

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    Very deep and heartfelt. the rhythm was well done. i felt the stuttered pace of it seemed to reflect the back and forth of the mind, and how we fight ourselves in this situation and have to force to get the words out at times. you realy captured the spirit of this poem well done

    Good Luck and Thanks for entering
    The Unrequited Writer
    Ben B.

  • Leaving Today
    March 16, 2007
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    quiet sad (even to read)...however, it should be "they are" instead of "their" in line number 23.

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