Today in the old folks home,
where Mary’s days are spent.
all around the room,
offering sweeties Mary went.
Everybody took one,
for it was kindly meant.
Then quickly they all spit them out.
‘cos it was Steredent.
Now everybody’s moaning.
It goes on through the night.
Why is it such a problem?
At least their teeth are white.
Each cloud has a silver lining.
They’ll find out in a while.
And we would see the benefit,
if only they would smile.
Author notes
I love real life stuff. On this occasion I was visiting my mom who's in a home. Then a dear old lady offered her 'sweets' around. I was the only one laughing, bless her heart. For anyone not familiar with Steredent, it's what they soak their false teeth in!!
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A contest entry
- Make me smile... by Malachi Nightbreeze.
300 points, ended April 2, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Ha, sometimes real life is funnier than anything you can make-up. Funny imagery you've penned here. I enjoyed reading your work.
Thanks for entering the Laugh out loud contest ~ was my pleasure having you. -
Well thought out and executed! I didn't know Steredent, but fortunately it becomes obvious! Congrats on the Golden Goblet and the Silver Slurpper.
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haha well done congrats
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This is so cute - one can laugh about it now - but I am sure at the time it was nsot all that funny! Congrats on the silver - easy to read and understand.
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Laughing-Out-Loud!
What I liked:
A humorous poem about an old folks' home. I recently visited one on a community service trip, so I certainly agree with what you said - they seriously do NOT like Steredent. Though I'm not quite sure why. LOL.
There were no problems with the rhyme and meter, which made it a pleasure to read aloud.
Suggestions for Improvement:
None! I found this piece very witty and original.
Overall Impression:
Thank you SO much for entering my contest. You certainly tickled my funny bone with this one! WELCOME TO THE FINALS!
~HaloElite
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Great
This is cool, and good luck
Midnight -
Oops- forgot your applauses!! And loved the story in the comment by YoursTruelyJulie (:
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LMPO (laughin' my pants off) >> This was hilarious, I definitely enjoyed this!! &
And I loved the story in the comment by Recluse Writer.
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Thank you for your comments. I am sure there's enough material for a book about The Old Folks Home. Certainly from where my mom is staying. Loads of funny stories there.
One old chap was always to be found in moms bed, I am told that his bed was the floor above. Yeh, that's what they say
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LMPO again!!
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ooh dear
I dont guess that tasted so good, but it is sure funny, thanks for entering the contest and good luck! -
This had me laughing, so I like it. Good luck in the contest....
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Dear oh deary me...my mind is flipping around with a few Old Folks Home funnies but I won't relate them here.
One I can on steredent...after being out ghost hunting as a kid we came home telling the eeriest stories to a freaked out auntie who took herself off to bed not wanting to hear any more of them. Uncle put steredent in her potty under the bed and related the tale of the deathly scream waking him in the middle of the night.
"Call the doctor quick!!! I am seriously sick, my pee is all fizzing up." Nasty nasty but hilarious at the time.
Good luck with this little ripper
Linda
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There must be some funny things go on in the 'oldies' home. I remember a friend of mine starting her nursing career in such a place, and one of the things she had to do was clean their 'falsies', yep you guessed it. She collected ALL the teeth in the one container, and then of course couldn't remember who's where who's 
and you can imagine what an ordeal that would be. Well done once again and good luck in the contest 
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Oh, that is so funny!
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This poem is so beautiful... and hilarious! I give this poem 2 thumbs up! Great job! Ha ha!
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