Your whisper is sweet subtlety,
winding words of guilty humility-
[yet I see love lives, your sponsor:
and hate halts so much sparser.]
Your hearts a happy harvest,
to hold your hand, I tried my hardest.
I tasted your enthusiasm,
[you, mine] emotions orgasm.
your eyes impressive indigo-
reflect reasons we should undergo,
this trying trial earnestly,
and live our life so honestly.
Author notes
Just wanted to see if I could pull it off. Clearly, I can't. lol
A contest entry
- Mission: Difficult IV by shewalksintomine.
1200 points, ended March 29, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I am terribly sorry for the generic comment. I have no good excuse, but it is a bit of a switch going from first to third shift. Please know that I did judge fairly and the winners of the contest will be who pixxie and I thought should win and not just on a roll of the dice.
Thank you kindly for entering my contest. -
I think you pulled it off rather nicely. You worked those words into here without making them stick out awkwardly. Everything flows together rather well. Thanks for giving it a go.
Please don't respond to this until after the contest should you choose to do so. I am co-judging and would like your entry to remain anonymous. Thanks! --->pixxie<---
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