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The Feelings Inside

the love i have for you is a love i have never felt
it happened so fast that it took away my breath
i want you to hold me
keep me safe
tell me you love me in every way
waiting for is killing me inside
but knowing one day you will be mine
helps me to cope
you always put the biggest smile on my face
when i talk to you
you take me to a higher place
the feelings inside me cant be explained
the love i have for you can never be erased
i want you to be mine
to stay in my life
hold me forever and keep me on your mind
loving you is like life
without it i dont think my days would go by
i know we just met and this all seems unreal
feeling this way
theres no way its unreal
i love you baby
you better believe it
hold me now
and forever more

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  • panegyric ink
    March 25, 2007

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    now this is exactly why i love to wrie and read poetry in the very first place!!!!!!!! you have done wonders for my muse!!!! overall, this is very complicated and so filled with love that it just reaches out and grabs me by the heart and pulls me so close and gives me a wet sloppied kissss!!!!!!!YEAH,YEAH!!!!'s & KUDOS FOREVER!!!!!!!


    • Sharkbaitoolala gold member
      March 25, 2007
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      thanks for the comment panegyric ink...i am so glad you liked it. it is one of my favorites i have a lot of love poems if you would like to look through my stuff...my newer ones are happier than the old ones though....some are very sad...lol...but its all good thanks for reading....
      love the shark


  • Spiritvision angel
    March 21, 2007

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    First time I have read one of yours but, I was not dissappointed. This is a heartfelt right with a little fear of uncertainty. I enjoyed this very much.

  • rozethorn
    March 17, 2007
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    great job my friend!!!!

    i like this one a lot sandra! well, good luck with everything hun.


  • Bethie
    March 17, 2007

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    hmmm.. If I didn't know you even the little I do, I'd think you had just found new love.. maybe this is an older poem just now being posted? Anyway, as far as the poem goes, it's really good. You've got some great rhyming and a neat beat going for you. As a suggestion, it might be 'tweaked' on those areas in places, but I know it's hard to change wording sometimes. This way is good as well. Keep 'em coming

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