In this world
We are told to do it
Do it with any person willing to "put out"
"Its fun, cool, you're a loser if you don't"
Are just a few of the comments our peers make towards us
You see it and hear about it everywhere
The advertisments, all the media
They tell us its ok
Well some of us still believe in the truth
Some of us like me
I also believe
That when you stumble and fall
God will help you pick up the pieces
He will forgive
That is the truth
I believe that its not ok
People need to save themselves
They need to save it for their spouse
It is satan trying to get us in his clutches
Don't give in stick to the truth
Author notes
"i'm a Jesus-freak"
A contest entry
- For Christians Only!! What are your veiws on this? by RuLives4GodOnly.
850 points, ended April 9, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Its My Faith..Can you poetically write about what you believe? or are you Chicken? by Theasp.
613 points, ended April 6, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You are correct.
You have written realistically while sticking to your values. Indeed we all have heard these same things. To say that we have not is not being honest with ourselves. -
This is a good free write
Although the last verse could have been held for another poem. You maintained a beat which a lot of people seem to be having problems with.
You might try switching the the next to last and last verse for greater impact since the poem is about truth
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A strong statement of faith at the end
This evokes a feeling of joy in that a young person is willing to hold on to tenets of their faith. I will return to discuss poeticism. Good job. -
Cool
way to go, tell em, because its sad the state of our nation concerning morals. Because most have none.
Awesome poem. I love the end:
"I also believe
That when you stumble and fall
God will help you pick up the pieces
He will forgive
That is the truth"
Really good.
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Very good. I don't know your real name but I know who you are. This is very well written and I'm proud of you for writing another poem. Thanks! Good luck and may God bless yyou always!
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wow
i'm back,i just had to read this poem again,this is really good,and if you haven't caught the signle yet i really like this poem.you're doing real good
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wow, that was a great poem. every time i mess up God is always there to help me pick up the pieces.good luck in the contest
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