Shadows grip at the room
Leaving it in a dead silence
Death has contaminated the air
Blood strewn everywhere
A young child in the center
A knife in her hands
Her parents bodies on the ground
And nightmares in her head
Author notes
Option 1
I saw a random music video of random clips and I kinda made a story out of them.
A contest entry
- Dark Masterpiece by Aeonna.
450 points, ended April 21, 2007, 20 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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needs length...good lucks. thanks
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wow, something i wish i could do to my family...lol i liked it. very good
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vivid images. i really like it :]
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wow this really sets the imagination off...for such a short piece of writing you involved so many emotions and meanings it was awesome. My favourite line is 'Death has contaminated the air' very powerful.
great write.
thanks for entering and goodlcuk
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this was a great write..short but very powerful as well..i enjoyed reading this..it was powerful and flowed really well keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest..
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I LOVE THIS. Short, to the point yet it comes with a big impact, it leaves most up to the gruesomist imagination, very well written. Kudos
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Thanks I'm glad you like it.
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you know...i have a little girl in the back of mind called Little Yami, idk if AJ's talked much about her, but we share a body when she's not down in Hell. this freakishly reminds me of her. great write - i think she liked it just as much as i did! *ya
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Yea, AJ's told me quite a bit. And so has Dralaar. (If you remember him.) Thanks for commenting on the poem, greatly apprciated.
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Wow this is amazing, I so love the imagery of this, keep up the great work!!!
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Thanks I'm glad you like it. You know I don't usually write poems so I'm hoping that this is actually good.
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