Begun as tiny seeds in mother's womb,
a womb that set them free, and bid them grow,
and grow they did, like vines, life wove their paths,
around the adolescent years to teens,
Two teens who met in breathless heartfelt awe,
in awe of first love's power on our souls,
Two souls that climbed to hieghts most seldom knew,
but knew that this sweet romance would not last,
The war called him away to distant fields,
fields strung up with barbed wire over death,
but death could not take claim of what they shared,
and so he shared his name when he got home,
And home was just a cottage by the sea,
a sea whose rhythms matched thier passion's flow,
as life flowed on, then with a smile she came,
she came to whisper they would have a child,
A child who soon was born, their pride and joy,
joy wrapped like three strong vines around their hearts,
Three hearts that someday far from now will stand,
stand tall beside son's bride, when he finds love,
love that will weave all future growing strands,
strands that make up the circle of their lives.
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A contest entry
- Write a Wreath by ea.
360 points, ended March 20, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I liked this very much and even noticed and liked the way you broke the wreath a couple times early on and thought maybe you were setting up a pattern there (as in lines 3 and 9) It makes me think it might be good to do one in that way, more deliberately, giving the wreath effect a little breather. This poem is a very pretty and succinct summing up of lives, a theme that lends itself meaningfully and well to this style. Thanks.
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A great write.This is a masterpiece.I was very happy after writing a wreath myself.Literally speaking I was on cloud 9 but the minute I read your poem,I came crashing back on planet earth...lol
God Bless You
Josh
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Quite beautiful, and your use of the 'wreath' works so well, woven within the beauty of your story, your words here about a circle of life and thank you for sharing your obvious skills and gift with us, good luck in the contest!
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Lovely. I read the first two lines, and the first thought was: Oooo, to repetitive. So, I stopped and checked out the contest. Turns out, it is not.
You have done nicely with this.
Well wishes in the contest.
Thank you for sharing.
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The flow in this piece is beautiful. The story is wonderful. It plays strings on my heart!
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This is absolutely beautiful. Full of heartfelt emotion. It was a joy to read. Life and love are two of the most precious gifts on earth. I really enjoyed this piece.
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