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Falling into You

So softly I fall into you
A dream of grass in pencil green
my mind floats
upon azure skies serene

I colour the world in splendour
Borrowed from a forgotten child’s
full paint box,
spilling imagination’s smiles

Your love caressed  the flowers
Stroked dusky pink satin
opening wide
their hidden hearts pattern

I rest beneath the trailing leaves
Light beams its smile upon the dew
as so softly
I fall into you


a poem by lightwing

Author notes

I combined two options just by chance. Option 1 and option 2f, they just seemed to go together

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  • pre... gold member
    October 10

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    yay you got gold for it

    exactamundo, as though things are right with world not brown dried atmosphere by mentality with "So softly I fall into you A dream of grass in pencil green" even explicitly influenced by others or implicitly by insistent effect of hard by horrible mood or otherwise.

    instead of reverting to childishness there's a sense of retaining child-like exuding because of you, "Your love caressed the flowers" brings the motivation to notice the beauty maybe not automatic, nor choppiness then either which can be resmoothed insightfully. cordate leaft etcetcera carries across many things for no extreme sense of it but all as ecosystem.

    the reverie feel is hightled more at "Light beams its smile upon the dew" with the loudening coloring...

    I enjoyed it brightly,
    carolyn


  • Climbing2nothing
    March 19, 2007

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    wow, the dream is wonderland here i really enjoyed the serene world you"ve created here, my inner child is jumping up and spiraling to my greatest times of love, in beautiful meadows and past girlfriends faces and picnics and... wow loved it evoked me and my heart is smiling thanks with warmth....

  • lightwing
    March 18, 2007
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    Thanks for the gold and congrats to the other trophy winners.


  • Angel With No Halo
    March 17, 2007

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    Oh how peaceful and wonderfully written. You managed to capture me with this one. Great job!! Thank you for entering and good luck

    ~Krys~