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Please Forgive Me



As I sit upon this rooftop
High above the world
Searching for my inner peace
Deep within my soul

There are so many questions
That rage within my heart
So many problems
I don't know where to start

With my body so still
I am frozen in time
Trying to find a way
To strengthen my mind

To overcome these fears
That rage within my heart
If only I had someone
To help me make a start

I really need to change
My life and my ways
My attitude towards society
And all that I say

My violent life
Has gotten me into a bind
And for these reason and more
I really need to find

Someone to love
Cherish and hold
To be with me always
And help me become bold

My heart is a mess
I'm weak in the knees
So I am turning to you now
And hope that you'll see

That I do want to change
The problems that I have caused
Throughout my life
Without even a cause

The emotional conflicts
That made you so sad
The anger and stress
In the present and past

The unfulfilled promises
That broke your heart
And everything else
I did at the start

I want you to know
That I am willing to pay
For the lies that I've said
From day to day

Please understand
The way that I feel
For deep in my heart
This promise is real

I want to apologize
For all that I have done
Now I know that
You really were the one

I took all of my anger
Problems and thoughts
Suppressed them within me
And sadly forgot

What a wonderful person
That you really are
Through all of my trials
You were that star

That picked me up
Whenever I was down
You made my world spin
Round and round

Please forgive me
Before you go
For I have done wrong
And now I know

Thank you for loving me
All of your life
I'm sorry I never asked
To have you as my wife

But then again,
It probably would never have worked
Cause up until now
I've been such a jerk

I love you my darling
Much more than before
From now on until the end of time
You will be given much more

Than you've ever expected
Wanted and cherished
For you've been neglected
By my selfish heart and savage mind

But through it all
You never would mind
I want you to know
That you need not worry
For deep in my heart
I am truly sorry

 

 

 

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  • Yunalonei
    August 10, 2008
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    Nice

    This is a very good poem and fits to my contest, you have followed my few simple rules also.
    My only advice is that the Stanza

    Than you've ever expected
    Wanted and cherished
    For you've been neglected
    By my selfish heart and savage mind

    Doesn't follow the same rhyme scheme as the others.
    Other than that it was a good piece.


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    August 10, 2008

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    awesome sad poem....... thanks for sharing this and good luck in this contest... you did some awesome rhyming....!


  • Poet of Dreams
    August 12, 2007
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    i loved the setniments and wording in this piece. i felt the flow was a bit off in places. try reading your poems outloud and see how easily they come out. this is what i do to make sure my poems flow well. all in all i really liked this piece, good luck in the contest

  • Kyoku Luv
    April 3, 2007
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    Hm....this was good. Very deep, and flowed quite well.
    Good job.


  • Rianna Bear
    March 16, 2007

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    I really liked how you made the first half about the speaker's reflections and thoughts, then switched it to the 'i'm sorry' part.

    good luck in my contest

    *rianna

  • Heavenly Star
    March 16, 2007

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    This is a great poem Jeremy you penned for your love promising to be true. Your rhythm and rhyme flowed superbly, well done dear poet and good luck in the contest


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    March 16, 2007

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    WoW Jeremy:
    My friend I am really loving this write of yours.
    I think so many people could relate to this. This is such a strong emotional piece. When you know you have done wrong and to be truly honest is taking a big step. Being forgiven is a bleesing.
    I really enjoyed this piece, I love your poems, they always have nice meanings. Good luck in the contest.

    Manyblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    March 16, 2007

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    Oh wow! It takes and strong, bold, and loving man to express these feelings, but to write them for all to see, makes you exceptional! This shows such regret and shame. Goodness, I am at a loss. This is just awesome! Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 16, 2007

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    jeremy, i can not imagine you ever cheating on someone as you are so kindhearted so to read this write from you astounded me that you could come up with something so fantastic. these words are ones that i longed to hear for so long. i did finally get an apology after a few years. this one almost affected me as much as his simple forgive me. i am not sure why but it did. good luck in this contest but i do not think you need it at all. i would forgive you. viyanna rosemarie

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