zymes of hardships in every ease
swing with the pendulum of everyday routine
a migraine aura woke me up today
and the pain of fatigue lulled me
overunderestimated strength of asthenia
soothing every molecule of my good will
behaving bad tonight as I approach your skin
with my catling and cruel intentions
it is so easy to confess my deadly sins
when I am drunk and you are deaf and dumb
when I am schizophrenic and forgiven
by the church and holy spirit of the void
What did you think
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I must say- quite the interesting choice of words! Such an educated and well- thought out poem is such a nice treat on this site. This piece was original, and very lovely indeed! I look foward to more!
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i had to read this twice to understand it- some vocab words you used im not too familiar with but they don't seem to disturb your work... im just trying to be as diplomatic as possible- interesting work -
I could see where you were coming from with this and it's tightly written but...it seemed to be lacking something.
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zymes interesting word. Never have seen it in poetry
I also liked 'migraine aura.' That is an interesting image. Makes my head hurt just to see the word migraine.
Overall this is an excellent piece e-ndrus . I look forward to seeing more of your poems posted.
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Quite a state of delirium here and a migraine is enough to do it for sure. Nice job! Welcome to AllPoetry. Irene
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you seem to be a good poet i liked this poem keep on writing!!!!!
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Quite interesting, i don't think i understood everything, but still what i did understand really made sense when i thought about it. It all seemed like the irony behind the stereotype/the real/the whatever...ya, you probabaly don't understand what i mean, but i do
...and thats good enough for now because i tend to be a bit confusing....lol ..anyways, nice write! ...write more, write moreeee 
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good start
well i have to confess that i didn't really understand what i just read...i think it's one of those things only understood by the author. good start! welcome to allpoetry. you have the spark of a gift for piecing words together. seemed like a sophisticated way of putting together some experiences of your life. good start, my friend!
~hazel
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