Sliding this knife across my wrist
letting my dirty blood drip.
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Can you see those scars all over my body?
Can you see my pain?
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Give up on me,
because I've already given up on myself.
!!
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!!
This life is making my body swell,
{holding all the pain inside}
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((Until I die))
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And I will not be the first,
to kill myself,
$$
{{To finally cash out}}
$$
Now you will know,
this is
^^
[The end of me]
^^
Author notes
Haha, Stange I know... You said anything, and somehow this crossed my mind, hope you liked it! Comments please, I would like to know what you think!
A contest entry
- ANYTHING! Seriously ANYTHING! by A Murderous Lament.
390 points, ended April 2, 2007, 75 entries
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Comments
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this is an interesting write...well done on showing us your emotions without words... always better to release it than bottling it up
regards jen -
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Thanks
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This was a truly sad and filled with deep emotion of pain and self harm although I understand the cutting, but this is also a good way to those deep painful feelings out. you did a very good job on this write. your words flowed well together. keep it flowing.
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Thank you
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Sad but true ~
Writing is definately a way of coping with everyday
stress and tribulations ~
I am in out-patient right now and I
have seen my share of cutters
and suicidal tendencies in many
people who think their world
is crumbling around them....
I am glad you got this out to
share with others who might be going thru
this as we speak.....I hope not,
but then that wouldn't be reality ~
Well done...
Bear ~
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Thank you.
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This is the best way to let the pain out, writing. Great way to do it.
Jeannie
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I am confused! I made a positive comment, so I am sorry if you didn't like it.
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okay, now I'm confused, all I said was thank you right? haha. Okay, om thanks for the positive comment! haha.
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Thank you!
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Love it. It's great... Been there soooo many times. There's a few places I think that could be made better. Just go over it and see if you could change anything ot make it better. Good job!
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like the little weird symbol things or you know the poem. haha.
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i am not realy a fan of cutting poems but i also understand the need to express your thoughts and this is very well done
a deeply sad and emotional write
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Interesting. I agree with Lily Skie, it flows well.
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very very good... i like the way it flows! =]
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