Paper hearts easily broken.
To no longer feel.
Love never spoken.
Saw you falling down.
Extend to you my hand.
Into the river we'll drown.
Is this our last stand?
Warmth disappears.
Death insight.
My greatest fears.
This can't be right.
She was dead.
I am still alive.
A moment to dread.
Why did I survive?
To live on..
such a waste.
She may be gone..
she won't be replaced.
Repeat once more.
I say farewell.
Nothing to live for.
I'll see you in hell.
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Comments
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this is a nicely written piece, the rhyming scheme is good and kept throughout the poem.. the flow is easy to read.. I really like these lines
"Warmth disappears.
Death insight.
My greatest fears.
This can't be right."
such heartache and despair can be felt, well done!!
thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
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good write, the rhyme scheme is wee bit finicky though, thanks for entering good luck
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so tragic. wonderful use of emotion. nice work. thanks for entering.
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A lot of emotion and I think everyone can relate to this at one point in their lives. Nice rhyming, simple and flows good. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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geez. is this real? like about you? thats so sad. love this n ummm...sorry for the loss if its really your story. good luck
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no its a story i made... if this was about me i would be dead(lol).
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This is really sad. Really well written. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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