I’m standing here
infusing my anguish
with each new rain drop
that falls down my face
with each new crimson bead
that rises on my wrist
turning my face to the sky
I open my mouth
and scream
ignoring everyone
who has ever existed
let me take your peace now
as I need it to survive
your name rises from my lips
stained with blood I cannot wash away
question after question
taints the liquid air
falls down with the rain
that smells so sweet
I fall to my knees
head bowing
silence overtakes me
and I smile
I hear a scream
from where I think you are
one little word
that you’re sending to me
and I hold it close
and cry
Author notes
this was written awhile ago...
it's bout my ex...
option 7 and 4....
A contest entry
- 8 options of madness by McFairy.
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Oh, what a touching piece. Pain pours from every word...this reminds me so much of my last breakup....never have I wanted to Earth to open up and swallow me more than I did that day. I remember falling to my knees in the middle of my living room...broken, devestated, and for the first time in I do not know how long, I prayed (not deeply religous, but I am very spiritual) for God to take it all away...I cried/screamed/sobbed myself to sleep in that very spot...curled in the fetal postion....arms wrapped around legs....and thank goodness the next morning awoke with such peace....it still hurt mind you....but all the crying and screaming...finally letting it out....helped...whew! Getting emotional right now! One never likes to revisit the pains of the past...but to be touched, in anyway, by anothers story is a blessing. Yours, my dear, touched me deeply. Best of luck to you!
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So so Sad
I can feel the pain as to what you went through, I have also felt this pain, and reading this poem reminds me so strongly of that time, its like not being able to breathe and all you want to do is scream, the frustration kills you. Really enjoyed reading this, very sad.
Thank you so much for entering and I hope that you are over what you felt then.
***Strangeangel*** -
awww...I liked it too. I like the rain...but, anyways, enough of my randomness, and back to the comment...
The rain is a great metaphor for sorrow. I love writing poetry with rain, because, simply put, it is easy to make metaphors. I loved this.
later,
-J_E_N_N-
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