Kind of like a needle, pinned in my side,
twisting itself around in writhing motions,
While I grasp it and hope it’s not my appendix
swelling up to twice it’s size.
Kind of like a chain-linked fence,
Just short enough to let the maniacs in,
Just tall enough to keep the neighbors out.
Always standing there ministering to the
refuges that look upon you with the
eyes of a servant,
as you tell them that they’re not as good as you.
Kind of like the food chain of society, measuring
Success by who has the biggest secrets to hide.
Pointing across the road to the beggar,
not saying (but certainly thinking) that he’s
The one responsible for our damn economy.
Peering through the glass window,
a real life out-of-body-experience,
waving to the wan and fragile man in the
plastic chair, you know can’t see you.
Watching him as he buttons down his shirt,
ties his shoes, and brushes through his balding hair
with his fingers.
Wishing you could tell him that it’s okay,
that the world’s still spinning.
But you’re horrible at lying.
It’s not okay.
Opening the bag of Dorito potato chips,
only to discover that the bag's half empty.
You always knew the government was ripping you off.
Writing poems in second person,
though you know they should be written in first.
Someone somewhere, told you once,
that it’s not good to use ‘you’.
(but you’re too clever to take advice)
Sticking note cards on every mirror,
tying strings on every finger.
By now you’ve forgotten what you
Were trying to remind yourself to do this morning.
Or night?
Killing two birds with one stone,
Really it’s more like ten.
Once reality sinks in, that this is wrong,
It’ll be too late.
Hooked on sobs and sad sedatives,
Anything that will help you sleep.
You’re eyes are drying, your pores are oozing
With yellow puss.
Sick songs about Satan slicing,
Six-six-six with skates and scalpels.
Signing autographs and singing anthems
Through puzzled airwaves.
The telepathy isn’t strong enough yet.
Looking at old receipts and repeating security numbers,
Making up recipes as you go along.
Mixing up chemicals, you pray don’t explode,
When forced together.
Sawing sounds from serpents’ sanctums,
I wonder why autumn ends in n.
A silent letter, like a missing variable,
You need to win the game.
-Solve
My head is pregnant with lies,
stringing them together like
bulbs on a Christmas tree.
I intertwine the stories and create a biography,
that begins with three dots.
…
(there’s that first person thing)
Graphing points and plotting numbers,
Echoing the voices of famous people.
‘Assume makes an ass out of you and me’.
Who said that?
Death comes knocking, yes he does.
Walking past me to and fro.
I dare not ask him who he wants,
I read his mind, I do not kn-
Kind of like a fortune cookie,
the white strip of paper reading “someone’s watching”.
And while you’ve never believed in signs or psychics,
You sleep with a gun, just in case.
No More Sedatives.
Author notes
Arrogance and judgemental stereo-types
ugh, I hate em'
A contest entry
- Here's the Soapbox...Use It by MuddyKing.
900 points, ended April 4, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - you are cumbersome. by j-ay rose.
410 points, ended July 1, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I first checked the categories- society, anger, annoyance! So before I read I tried to guess what it was about... so many things to choose from! So I gave up, and began reading... but no! I saw the author's comments- arrogance and judgemental stereo-types! I was immediately reminded of a piece I recently posted on pretty words in poetry, could this be about ME? (but then we all think a piece is about us, so I dismissed that notion!) OK, still no clue as to what the annoyance is in particular, only in general, so to begin reading... ah! A soapbox contest! Then I noticed the comment about humor... and picking out stanzas... (OK, reading now!)
I'm trying to relate the poem with the author's comments, can't quite do it... I like that 'assume'... and the three dots, which I use profusely as I never reveal all my thoughts... so the piece reminds me of when I was young and writing in streams of thought, creative... many hundreds of thousands of words... so I see you began with the stereotype theme, but veered off into Doritos and alliterations... which is OK, you just need to alter your author's comments to read 'a stream of young consciousness'! -
love it
i liked your cheeky/dryish sense of humor there, it added some character. this was one of those poems that i will begin reading and then routinely pick out my favorite stanzas as i go, (so i'll have something nice to say when i comment) but as the ones i like begin to greatly out-number the ones i dont...well then i stop counting and conclude that it's a pretty darn good poem as a whole. i think the length added a little something to it too, at first glance it would seam to drone on and refuse to end but as this poem built up it tended to stay up there to the last line.
i could go on about how i liked the subject matter and all that but you basicly get what i'm saying
i hope this wins a trophy in that contest
b&p





