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Mother

Yes mother I see you
and yes mother I can hear you
yet as I watch your swollen cheeks
as tears of red like blood flow down
I feel only pity
there is no love felt from me to you
just regrets
which I am sorry to say
you whom bore me
yet left me
yes you left me mother
and you left not only me
you left my younger sister and my father
yes mother I thank God you left me with my father
the only thing you did right
now you think you can just come back
and be the mother you should have been
well It's a little late and time is not doing so well
on the end of my healing
I hurt mother,yes I hurt
do you think you are the only one that cries
may I remind you mother
love not only fades,it also dies
and now your red,red tears mean nothing
so you can wallow in your self pity
as now their is another
that I will always call mother
she has taken your place from the time I was three
and now ten tears later mother
yes I am now a teen
its too late mother so just walk away
and maybe you will find the love you need someday
you are looking in the wrong place mother
don,t look at me for I have no regrets
of the pain you caused in my life mother
you see to me
a real mother to me is love
and even though she is a step
she has walked many more miles than you ever will
you see mother she walked into my life
and she stayed
unlike you she did not walk away.

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  • HiddenByTheDark
    June 14, 2008
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    Bravo

    very good poem and i can relate


  • Delicate Fire Water
    December 21, 2007

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    *WOW*

    This was superb! I really felt your pain in this piece, and from such a young writer too! I applaud you! Thank you so much! Thanks for entering, and good luck!

    All the best,

    *Stephi*


  • Nostalgia
    December 8, 2007

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    A painful, heartfelt piece, there are some grammar mistakes, but over all I enjoyed it. For me, a mother is comfort and love, and I'm saddened that all mothers aren't that to their children. Emotional and well put write, thanks for entering.


  • Li snuffles
    December 4, 2007

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    a real mother to me is love
    and even though she is a step
    she has walked many more miles than you ever will

    i love your last little section

    thank you for entering.. this poem is beautiful
    ..xxx


  • l33t-n1nj4
    November 24, 2007

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    I liked it a lot. I feel the pain and the love. I know the feeling all to well I might add only on the other side so I know what u are trying to explain. Good write. And good luck. Keep writing.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 24, 2007

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    A wonderful write indeed. Very heart felt. It is awful that a mother can leave her children, just walk away, I am a mother and I could not do it. You have written a superb piece, full of hope to any in the same situation. Although the very last line, should it be unlike you she did not walk away? It just sounds as tho' she to walked away. Best of luck in the contest


  • okadadokie
    March 19, 2007

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    A very strong emotional poem. It's hard when people leave and try to come back thinking nothing has changed. Great job. Good luck.
    ~Oka


  • Princess Amy
    March 15, 2007
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    This is a good poem.. Thank you for entering... I wish you luck in my contest...

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