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A New Hope

Across the dull grey sky,
There is a crack of sunlight,
A crack of hope.

As I sit in the cool summer breeze,
Among the tall thin blades of green grass in the open space.
I long for the crack of sunlight to broaden.

I think of all the times I failed.
When I fell down. When I fell in love.
And then I think of the time I picked myself up.

I gaze into the distance at the crack in the sky.
It slowly grows and the fields become brighter.
I think of my life at the moment, and I smile.

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  • misticmoonlite gold member
    August 23, 2007
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    good over all job on this poem I see the effort you brought forth, good luck in our contest,SH


  • Frogzter gold member
    June 14, 2007

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    I loved the imagery this brought to mind! THanks for sharing in our contest and best wishes!

    Frogz~


  • Frozentearz
    June 14, 2007

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    Thank you for sharing within our contest,
    it is always a joy to be able to sit think about our life and smile, I like the imagery you have given us of that.
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 21, 2007

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    What a wonderful poem you have penned here!
    It's always great to find that one crack of
    sunlight in our days. It can help to brighten
    the worst and darkest of all of our times.
    This is a great reminder that the sun will
    always shine for us. Like anything and everything
    in life, it just takes time. I love this piece.

    Thank you for your entry in my contest!
    I appreciate it and wish you the best of
    luck with it in my contest! Keep up the
    great work here!



    Jeremy0826


  • Lollilou2
    March 22, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this poem.
    It's full of optimism for the future and yet encorporates nature well into the poem.

    I gaze into the distance at the crack in the sky.
    It slowly grows and the fields become brighter.
    I think of my life at the moment, and I smile

    This is my favourite part of the poem as it evokes such positive emotions.

    The only thing I would say about one line is 'tall green grass' I'm sure you have better descriptive words in there Princess

    • princess-bubblegum
      March 22, 2007
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      Aww, thanks hun! Infact, you're right there! I will put on my thinking cap and come up with a more descrptive word to create better imagery for "tall green grass" and let you know when im done! =P Luv ya always! xxx


  • Seltz
    March 15, 2007

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    Across the dull grey sky,
    There is a crack of sunlight,
    A crack of hope.
    beautiful poem really heartfelt, i really ejoyed the hole thing.......
    I think of all the times I failed.
    When I fell down. When I fell in love.
    And then I think of the time I picked myself up.

  • Fisher
    March 15, 2007

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    an interesting piece

    It is often diffficult to incorperate nature into a poem because it is so beautifull in itself one runs the risk of doing it an injustice. Yet I feel you have cleverly identified your own personal case4 with an image of cool freedom in the form of a person amidst grass becoming enlightened by the sun/hope.


  • Buried in Black
    March 15, 2007

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    This really made me feel good. making me remember meories i miss. i loved it. the description brung emotions with them. along with the perfect scene it visioned. Love it all


  • QueenofTomorrow
    March 15, 2007
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    i really like this. the symbolism and everything. wellpenned. thanks for entering and good luck

  • Topaz
    March 15, 2007

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    Life light grows... beautiful

    A beautiful poem .... I like how the thought builds from one string of hope to the opening stream of hope...

    "A crack of hope."
    "I long for the crack of sunlight to broaden."
    "It slowly grows and the fields become brighter."

    Reading the poem it paints a vivid picture in the minds eye. Wonderful write. All the best in the contest.

    Judi



  • Whyitt U
    March 15, 2007

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    I love this...A new hope, a new light. Perfect ending!!! What a lovely pick me up poem....Well Done!!!

    Whyitt U xxx


  • angelsslayer
    March 15, 2007
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    Lovely write. Vivid scene.
    " I think of my life at the moment, and I smile."
    A great ending to the poem.

  • piccola silver member
    March 15, 2007

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    this is a really up-lifting write. I enjoyed how you used the word falling...falling down, falling in love. That was great. I like imaganing light breaking through the clouds is a beautiful image too. Nice job.

    • princess-bubblegum
      March 15, 2007
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      Thankyou very much! It is a beautiful image, especially when you can share it with someone who appreciates it too! Thankyou for the comment!

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