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I cry when it rains

I cry when i see an animal in pain
I even cry when it rains
For it is God's tears that I fear
makes rain

I cry when i hear of the elderly suffering
from being negected,and feeling forgotten

Sometime i cry for no reason,because i
feel the whole world is not right
I see laughter from others,at the blind
because they  lost sight

It pains me to think some people just dont
care about the salvation of their brothers,and
sisters

I cry when i see an animial in pain
I even cry when it rains
It's God's tears I fear makes rain

I cry for the mothers of this world
for those who lost their child to the
sins of this world

I cry for the junkies,the poor,the homeless,
the brokenhearted,and I cry for you. I feel
your pain

I cry because you make me feel unloved,unwanted,and ashamed
I cry when it rains,fear from God's tears of pain

 God so loved the world,God sent jesus, to say whom I'am pleased

 

I cry when I see an animial in pain

I even cry when it rains

because I know its  tears from above

tears from so much pain

 

I cry when i see an animial in pain

i even cry when it rains

for it is God's tears that I feel makes rain,God's tears from so much pain

May God have mercy, on the souls that remain

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  • bevn103
    July 26
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    Great poem "I Cry When It Rains", also very moving.

    bev.

  • bevn103
    July 26
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    I thought I cry when it rains was a very moving poem

    I loved the entire poem entitled "I Cry When It Rains, by Jazman. I liked the way it flows, I liked how it got the point across that certain things can cause a pain in ones heart, for various reasons. I liked the idea of including animals as something that makes you cry. I loved the idea of rain being the tears of God. It has a kind of melancholy feeling which is what brought tears to my eyes. It makes you want to do something to help stop the tears from being so abundant in this world.

    bev.


    • jazman
      September 16
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      Bev from the Jazman

      Once again thank you. I believe that if this art made you cry,then you felt the sprite of God. Bev,when you see someone cry. Cry with them. it's helps you as well to better understand human behavior. much respect from the Jazman


  • S A Adelmann
    October 2, 2008

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    Line three probably shouldn't have the plural "they are" rather than "it is" - no need to make the plurals match. And I am sure you mean "negected" in line 6, not "neglected". After all, this is art, right?

    • jazman
      December 20, 2008
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      Thank you Scott

      12-20-08 today i reread your comments. yes you stand correct. And i will make the changes to my art. Scott this is the first time i've ever done somthing like that. you will see it soon. when i can figure out how. Thank you very much for your imput. keep the Jazman correct(smiles).

    • jazman
      October 4, 2008
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      To Scott Adelmann

      Thank you Scott for the information. "they are" does sound better. English was never my favorite subject in school,and nor was spelling.(smiles)Much respect from the Jazman.

    • jazman
      October 3, 2008
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      To :A

      Yes it is art,please listen to others who have commented on the Art. Did you see any one comment on the spelling. Ask yourself if you understood anything that was said,or did you just focus on the mis-spelled words. yes the Jazman is pleased with the spelling of Neglected as to negected. some who have responded to the art in print,and by word have told me that I to Cry when It Rains. After all,this is art,right?. Much respect from the Jazman


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 27, 2008

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    your cry is just the voice of your enlighted soul dully equipped with the sentiments of universal God..well stated verse you brought ...


  • LivinitupCutie
    June 30, 2008

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    This poem moved me in such a way..I'm glad I've read this beautifully sad written piece..People are just blindly see what's wrong with the world now...hidden in their shells acts like everything is alright...destroying mother nature, man made weapons, lost souls, killing each each just for power and money...this is all of our doing and some have stood up to fight back but all ended up can't do a thing about it...

    Keep penning!!!
    Lieu

    • jazman
      September 16
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      Hello lieu

      it's been over a year since you read the art titled,I cry when it Rains. I hope that you share the art with your friends,and it brings you good things in life. If it brought tears to your eyes,then i feel as thou God smiled at you. much respect from the Jazman


  • dreamfinder
    June 20, 2008

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    Wow

    I really like this poem in so many ways. It's a true poem. One with feeling and a message and then it drives it home with the last 4 lines again. I enjoyed the ride in this. Thank you for sharing a part of you.


  • Young Confusions
    December 9, 2007

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    I'm so glad I found your poem coz I know how you feel, sometimes people don't understand why you should cry about something that doesn't physically affect you. Your work shows exactly why and I loved it


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    September 7, 2007
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    This is absolutely brilliant. I can so relate to these words and I believe them wholeheartly. I really loved the ending when you said it was God's tears. It was a really powerful ending. If you ever get the chance, I have one similar, called This World. Great work on this one.

    • jazman
      December 2, 2007
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      Thank you

      Thank you very much vanessa for reading the poetry I Cry when it Rains. I'd like to say three things. 1. what made you want to read this poetry?. 2. it takes a very special person to understand the beauty of,and the art of it's nature,for that is the similarity of both the writer,and the reader. a truly shared understanding of human nature. 3.you are special.


    • jazman
      November 24, 2007
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      To vanessa

      thank you so much for your kind words. I Will read your art real soon :This World:

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