The atmosphere looked at herself
in the mirror, and the ocean
gazed back at her;
waves of white clouds, curled
like twisting bans of hurricanes-
concentrated on evaporation
as narcissus remedies rained down
when tides faded away
storming smiles, sunlight shined in
self- absorption.
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Ch-ching BOOM.
[yeah, i'm very random]
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So I see a lady who is so obsessed with her self she ignored her true lover? Don't know if I'm even near being right, but it did have interesting imagery.
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random but amazing
the title says it all. this was fucking great.
~dkr
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lol self-absorption. Random, but thought provoking, I must say. I'll probably be mulling this one over all night and come morning will have an epiphany about something grand, I'm sure. Darn you!
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Not... not another natural disaster reference poem! *dies*
.. but it still rocks. I love you. lol
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lol thanks. I love you too. <3
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[guess what movie i just watched in total honor of you?
the day after tomorrow]
sorry, back to the poem, i love the 'twisting bans of hurricanes' line.. your freakin' awesome at natural disastor metaphor thingies.. ily bro
[this definitely deserves three smiley clappy dudes]
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lol is that movie amazing or what?
Thanks for the comment, you make me smile like... i dont even know.
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it is srsly! they did an awesome job with that, phenomenal-
yay! i made you smile, dude thats totally awesome considering i've made 3 people cry today
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LOL how the heck did you do that?
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it was easy- i cussed out my sister on the phone tonight because she deserved it and she cried.. then i bitched at a friend on myspace for half an hour and she cried. and last but not least, i punched my brother in the gut hard enough to knock the air out of him, so he cried..
i've got mad skills
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ROFL you're crazy.
you and lindsay ought to get in a fight.
now that would be interesting.
but she'd have to beat you up.
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i know i am..
what! i'm not getting in a fight with lindsay, she's way too cool.. plus i'm all talk, 2 out of my 3 victims today were 3 hours away from me, and they couldn't hurt me back.
anyways, i'm going to bed, i have to get my god damn senior pics taken tomorrow..
#*(#@$#%#@$#!!!!
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