Feel pulse throbbing, heart beats slow
Sounds of sobbing, do they know?
Flashes of purple and red, beneath eyelids appear
Nothing left to be said, nobody left to hear
Sorry was not enough, dead, but still near.
Author notes
Needle in murderer out.
A contest entry
- Quickie by Hadji Murad.
300 points, ended April 6, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is the best poem I have read so far that rhymed. Tragically rhyming is incredibly hard to do. What bothers me about this is it's cliched.
I've read poems like this already in this contest. As a poet it's always important and nice to step outside and write.
I do like what you said. There were some interesting phrases.
Thank you for entering and best of luck. -
interesting
You have painted a canvas like someone's last breath for some useless untimely death. I applause you for this poem and wish you luck in your challenge...
Thank you for sharing this with me...
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WELL...................
Strange, but very interesting. You have a wild thought pattern going on here. Cool write for the contest. I enjoyed reading and commenting on your poetic penning.
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very interesting look at someone's last few minutes. i wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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