Why is it that LIAR is written all over your face.
Sullen eyes scream " I really do need your help"
and the thing faker than that smile, is your excuses.
sipping citrus spritzers while putting on a show,
But each new trip to the Emergency wing
raises a few more eyebrows.
Weave that web one more time
and when they all become too concerend, it's off again.
Caressing fists tell the same old tale
One of extravagant lies and religiously broken promises...
Author notes
mmm... ten lines or less
there you go
A contest entry
- Quickie Contest - 2000 points for Gold by Nicole Hanna.
3500 points, ended March 15, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i love it i love it i love it i do!!!!
my god it's magnifcant!
damn! its great
good job caitlin
goooooood jooob!
ily
dax
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I love this. Yes, I know what you're thinking: two comments in one day? I guess I just love your stuff that much. Anyway, I like the spacing on this, it emphasizes the beat and flow. Love the story behind this too.
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But each new trip to the Emergency wing
raises a few more eyebrows.
Weave that web one more time
and when they all become too concerend, it's off again.
Caressing fists tell the same old tale
One of extravagant lies and religiously broken promises...
arghh i know i nearly copied it all
but wow.
LOVE like actually LOVE that last line. thats going on my homepage,
kites in the sky i love your vocabulary
mwah
moonshine
xxxx
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lol You sounded so unsure of yourself in your author notes. But you pulled it out with the last line very well. Thanks for your entry.
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So are you trying to cover up that this person is getting beaten!? *shakes head* ahh. I do like the wording and the beat...it's fast paced and my heart was racing. Only because I wanted to break some teeth.
Rosita
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