You hide beneath your grin,
Of the most sadistic sort,
A number of lies.
In your hard eyes I see you,
Trying to find my weakness.
My teeth grind into,
My bottom lip,
Involuntarily I shake my head,
Thinking if only you knew,
-You are my weakness-
A contest entry
- Quickie Contest - 2000 points for Gold by Nicole Hanna.
3500 points, ended March 15, 2007, 18 entries
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wow thank u for you genorous comment and yes i am kinda new at this but im sure i will get better along the way.. o yes and by the way your poetry is also lovely im sure i will be visiting your profile quite a bit thank you again for your comment ♥
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The middle two lines were lovely, though I'm not a big fan of the repetition of "my weakness" at the end. I would LOVE to see it end with "thinking if only you knew". something about that is so subtle and strong. Loved the piece.
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