He kept my mind in a cardboard box:
He said, 'that ducttape triumphs over
everything', and the sides warped with
the packing, pressing so firmly
at all sides.
Stored my sanity, juiced like an orange
[with the rinds you ripped
to pieces; parching my clockwork
of conciousness.]
the lid sagged. [but never opened.]
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I've never seen A Clockwork Orange. I imagine it must be good if it's to be referenced so well in something like this.
Anyway, duct tape does triumph over everything...I used it once on an old backpack in high school for a while, until the sticky part start seeping through. That was bad.
If you're a prude, I must say, I'm not too sure about it--a prude would write, well, prudish stuff. This isn't prudish. It's succinct and strong.
I'll go ahead and stop commenting here, 'cause I suck at it.
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yipyip. agree with the clockwork orange comment. burgess is the most amazing writer.
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I'm glad people caught it.
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im sorry, but burgess triggers my love-reflex. you used to before you got that little boy-toy of yours (yeah. still jealous. hahaha)
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He may be my boytoy, but he doesn't really talk to me much.
It makes me sad. But hey, he asked first. First come, first serve.
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i think im with mel anyways.
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I think so too.
I'm abit too young for you, I think. -
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i dated freshmen and sophmores my senior year in high school...
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I like olders guys, but they don't like me. probably cause I wont sleep with 'em, though. Oh well.
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haha. thatll do it...
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My mind feels a little saggy sometimes. I liked the play on clockwork orange, wether intentional or not (though I'm hard-pressed to believe that's accidental lol). The juiced line was fantastic as well.
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