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Contagious Emotions

I'm sorry for writing, please don't be offended
I just had to inform you that nothing has ended
Still attempting to forget what I don't want to remember
If I could, I would rewind back to the third of September
Find the former plastic image of who I used to be
And make absolutely sure that she won't turn into me
At two AM she will close her eyes, starting to pray
While I write her a note that says "Amanda, stay inside today"
After all of the protection and pride you injected
Are you really blaming me for getting infected?
I'm warning you, if this is what you want to do
I'll put the blame on myself for this whole mess too
Your rare and deadly case of contagious emotions
Gives me a denied, but continued devotion

If she won't find the note, and she stays unaware
I'll crawl in her pocket to follow her there
I'd shout "Security, kick this girl out of the Faire!"
To make sure she never starts living on prayers
Or if I could get her attension a bit
Then I'd try to talk her out of it
I'll say "What might seem amazing will just make you sadder
Go where you like, except don't go near the ladder
Underneath it, there's a snake that creeps through the hay
If you hear someone scream then start running away
There will be consiquences if you choose to stay
One year later, you'll be all alone and here's what you'll say:
'It was a lethal dose of wrath and betrayl he injected
Why is he still blaming me for getting infected?
If this has always been what he intended to do
I'll put the blame on myself for this whole mess too
His rare and deadly case of contagious emotions
Gives me a pulsing hatred, but continued devotion'"

Author notes

Late September 2006... Yet another poem written in inspiration of he-who-must-not-be-named. The guy fell off the face of the earth and we never talked again. But it wasn't my lover that I missed.... it was my best friend.

I'll type out a little story of how I met him so some of the lines make more sense... On September 3rd, 2005, I went to the Renisance Faire with a good friend of mine. We were innocently walking along the path when someone screamed behind us. We jumped, and turned around to see a young, hot guy who was working and had intenstionally tried to scare us. I told him he was cute, and we started talking... He was running a game with a ladder that was a few feet above ground and it was suspended by two ropes so if you weren't careful climbing it, you would flip upside-down and fall in a pile of hay... He joked about wanting to put his snake in the hay the next year... Before we left, he kissed me and gave me his number. I was with him for almost a year. Somewhere in this poem, there's a line that says "I'd shout "Security, kick this girl out of the Faire!", To make sure she never starts living on prayers"... The "living on prayers" reference is from what he had called "our song" because if I wasn't feeling good, he'd play "Livin On a Prayer" by Bon Jovi over the phone.


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  • GypsyEyes
    December 20, 2007

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    the authors note just emplains in better detail your poem. i really enjoyed this. it had alot of emotion. i wish you good luck in my twin's contest.
    ~Dommi


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    December 16, 2007

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    Aw wow. This poem itself is just very good, but once you explain it in your A.N. it makes that much more sense. You put so much personal meaning and emotion into this one that it's truely great. Thanks for entering into my contest.


  • Rana
    November 18, 2007
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    This is a very great write, as well as the flow of it. It unfolded throughout, and the flow was easy paced, not rushed. I like how you explained all that happened in the author's notes, not many would open up to that. Thank you very much for entering!


  • freestallion
    September 12, 2007

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    This is an interesting poem. The authors notes really clarifies things as well. However there are a few spelling errors. Thanks for entering my contest.


  • LadysDragon
    August 11, 2007
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    Sad and very good,thank you and goodluck!


  • forbidden-colour
    July 29, 2007
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    AW!
    Sad.. <3
    Thank you for entering [:


  • Memoirs of a Girl
    July 17, 2007
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    It is a great write and I know how this feels. However, the object of the contest was not to write about a break-up, it was to write about someone you fell for and you fall for them everytime you see them again, even if they're not right for you. Sorry, but i think this missed the mark. Great write, though!
    ~Memoirs

  • Honeydew
    June 12, 2007
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    wow

    great write..so sad.thanks for sharing.


  • Sunset Dreamer
    May 28, 2007

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    wow

    Long distance relationships suck. when you cant be near the one you think about constantly. heartbreak of circumstance is unavoidable but harsh. Great Entry!
    Thanks for entering, and good luck. ♥Kira


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 27, 2007

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    Wow

    The authors write is as interesting as the poem. Congrats on already winning silver and H.M. You did great ~ Good Luck going for the gold~ I really liked this ~


  • Leech Lover
    May 22, 2007

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    This is a wonderful write. I feel as if im in your head, and heart. feeling what you feel. this is really good. goodluck in my contest


  • Haunted Doll
    May 8, 2007
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    "Gives me a pulsing hatred, but continued devotion'" loved that ending line. it was an interesting write filled with emotion but became even deeper after reading your author notes. had that happen to me before. he still haunts my mind every now and again.

  • goalsv
    April 28, 2007
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    Very good poem! I also liked reading how you came about it! Bravo!


  • Dark Whispers
    April 28, 2007

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    this I think is a wonderful poem/story and I really enjoyed reading it , thanks for entering in my contest.


  • Captain Obvious
    April 10, 2007

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    aw! this was a very sweet poem with an equally sweet story behind it. i'm sorry about your heartache. good luck! -Captain Obvious


  • Angel With No Halo
    April 9, 2007

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    This was a wonderful way to express pain and love for someone. How heartbreaking to be with someone for so long and to have that happen. I am sorry.

    Thank you for entering and good luck

    ~Krys~


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 27, 2007

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    i too have a must not be named person and was so relieved to see this as now i know i am not the only one. thank you for sharing this with me and congratulations on the silver. viyanna rosemarie


  • ShInE45DoWn
    March 25, 2007

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    strong.

    Wow. This was a very good write, nice rhyme scheme and good flow.
    "attension", i believe you mean "attention"? but i've been wrong before ;]
    The explination in your author notes was a nice touch, and I had figured most of it out in the poem, so you conveyed your emotions well.
    Good write and good luck
    shinE*


  • HowardsDaughter
    March 25, 2007

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    I loved this, the emotion is incredible, and I really admired the ryhming, the use of volcabulary was great and everything seemed to fit, a really wonderful write.
    Good luck in my contest
    x


  • okadadokie
    March 20, 2007

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    I wanted emotions, and you gave them to me. This poem is full of so many different emotions. Wow. Great job. Good luck.
    ~Oka

  • piccola silver member
    March 20, 2007

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    There's really a lot to wade through here. I'm glad the injection wasn't something lethal. The rhyme is pretty good and weaves a sad story. thanks for the entry.


  • Diggs McGee
    March 19, 2007
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    nice imagery.
    i read the story of the whole mess first, then the poem.

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