his halogenation is insurmountable
and races to strip the slimy skins
of his micelle in the diastereomers
the contestation of his luxurious life
leaves the world around him shrieking
as he watches the orbital alkylation
of his insurmountable halogenation
Author notes
thank God! the Narwhale has finally been found! much thanks to Tox who found my zine and sent this poem to me.
A contest entry
- Your Best Prewrite 2 by Heavenly Angel.
450 points, ended December 10, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For the love of god CONFUSE ME by h202.
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Comments
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i'm having a lot of trouble with "of his micelle and diastereomers". i looked both words up and still don't really get it.
anyway, i see this as being interpreted in two ways.
one, i see this being about someone who leads a luxurious life, but struggles to be more "organic" around his own world.
second, i see this as actually about a narwhale. i don't really understand the title unless this is indeed about a narwhale. "slimy skins" reminds me immediately of sea creatures that the narwhale hunts, and halogenation just makes me think of halogen light bulbs that light the narwhale's excursions through the sea.
actually, the more i think about it, i see these two interpretations intertwining. the narwhale could represent a person, desperately trying to make his rich, easy, luxurious life more organic and real. let me know if anything i've said makes any sense, but no matter what i'm seriously impressed. good vocab on top of it all too. -
Unique and creative
Well done
Thank you for sharing and for being a part of this contest
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Good background choice. AND GOOD POEM!
love,
Steven
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