The dreams haunt me
all day long. Your phantom
touch caressing me
when I least expect it.
Your memory bores
its way into my thoughts.
I think of what went wrong,
what we could have done
to fix us. I wonder
if you've found someone
to hold you together,
to support the weight
of your problems.
I was too weak,
too overburdened and selfish.
I wiped the sweat
from your brow, but left
you to struggle
through the mire alone.
Now I'm forced
to swallow down guilt.
Let it ooze down my throat
like the boggy waste
I deserted you in.
I'll think of you
while it digests.
Author notes
Believe it or not it's about love. Well, the way that feelings will follow you and refuse to fade no matter how much you want them to disappear. So I guess it's more about lost love, but that's still love, right? SO, now I'm rambling...
Photo credit: A dedication by muted pain
A contest entry
- Anything for Anyone (come have a look!) by I-Feel-weightless.
450 points, ended April 1, 2007, 19 entries
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Wow what a image you've painted, you flow yoru wrods together so well. Very nicely sdone.
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Awesome write. I loved the last line. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Lost love
Lost love is better then no love.
Joe -
Maybe you should take the antacids...
...again, blown away. You want a critical comment? Too bad. It'll just take too long to write and I don't have enough compliments in the old change purse.
Cheers.
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'The dreams haunt me
all day long. Your phantom
touch caressing me
when I least expect it.' - the emotions in this are litterally chilling, and so very relatable- the fact that someone can have such a profound and lasting effect on you that you still feel them there...and you really feel the guilt for having left them...
This really grasps you from the first line and takes you along through such a myriad of emotions...i was swept away by the memory.
Brilliant write...
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'i'll think of you while it digests' perfect ending to this poem. i also liked 'support the weight of your problems'
your writing has improved one heck of a lot since i first started reading your work especially the free forms. well... i tend to favor free form in writing it and reading it so i guess i kinda lean that way
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