My Love
My Friend
If I could have you near me
I would make a place
to keep you close
to love you
in secret
and send away time
and close the world
around us... from us
and fade away the day
to dwell with you
alone
in the night
I would lay you down
and bring you near
to hold me close
within you
and give my self to you
with tender tears
for the joy
of having found you
and look
within your wondrous eyes
for the signs of love
I adore in you
in that moment
all will be known
just with a touch
hands caressing... fingers laced
from your care
I will give my life to you
as a gift to your heart
and love you
for all you have become to me
in secret
LeeL
Author notes
Making words for a friend
A contest entry
- Make Me Fall in Love... by trista.
450 points, ended October 20, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hi Rick,
I'm glad you found something to enter in the contest, not that you have any shortage of romantic writes. lol
You have my thoughts on this from before, so let me just say...thank you for entering and good luck to you.
Much love,
~J.
P.S. Sorry I can't leave applause again.
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My Sweet AP Wife
I am so sorry I missed your comment
You know I am always trying to catch up with you in trophies
You just have too many, from thoes little HiCoo things
Don`t you feel like you are helping me catch up, by giving me this HM... lol
I will read your old comment again
This is the shortest comment I have recieved from you in a year
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LOL Believe it or not, I do leave "short" comments on occasion.
As for my "HiCoos", they aren't much different than your little 20 word quickies. 
You deserved the HM, btw.
~J.
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how beautiful..sigh..what a great thing..and a wonderful write!
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Geish
Trickie picture Girl
Thank you for your very kind comment
Rick
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yet another beautiful write..sighs..smiles
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Asdzaa
Thank you for saying beautiful
Thank you for the three Smilies... CooL
Like your picture, great looking horse
Rick
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Hi Dear Rick
Hi I am on right now.
Need someone to talk to.
Nice poem. Very Pretty
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Hi Angel
Sorry I wasn`t on to talk
Thank you for reading this
Rick
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Just reading again. Perfect.
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Thank you Robert
Rick
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How do you do it? Make a hard-ass like me cry, and then smile...what a gift you have and one lucky lady I am sure..You string together verses, sentiments, emotions, passion, soul so well it could melt the choclate off a frozen strawberry...your words linger in my thoughts and on my heart for hours even after I have finished reading...you are all-consuming with your writes...one gets tangled up in a smoothe enveloping embrace that is warm to all the senses, heart, and soul...Magnificent!
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Whoochi
I thank you for your beautiful comment
I like this
You string together verses, sentiments, emotions, passion, soul so well it could melt the choclate off a frozen strawberry.
Cool
I thank you
Rick
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SPECTACULAR!!
This is so very BEAUTIFULLY written I love every
single line in this write. so very Lovely and
really touched my heart. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. Thank You!
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Hi Kathy
Thank you for reading my writing
I hope you will read more
Thank you for your comment
Rick
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What a magical write. I thought it was very powerful in and of itself. I like your use of depth, it spoke eons too me.
--Nanners -
Beyond Precious-
Beautiful verse You have penned my Friend
What words to wrap Your Friend around in and lullaby to sleep with~
Thank You for sharing these words spoken from the Heart
I can only imagine a HUGE smile on her face after inhaling the sincerity that speaks volumes
from Your words~
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Sigh
"from your care
I will give my life to you
as a gift to your heart
and love you
for all you have become to me"
I love this, it speaks to the soul. For your words are sincere and a blessing treasure of the heart. Which not all of us have...
God Bless,
me
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Beyond the most beautious
Wow, you have captured my heart for life with these cascading gold flecked words...Just when I needed you most.
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Rick:
This is so full of romance, within this write is tons of passion. it shows pure love an lots of care for your special friend. I know for a fact that she is blessed to have you in her life. I know for a fact that she is very much adored by you. Your friend is going to love these words. I have a feeling that your friend feels all the same thing for you.
Your friends wants you to know that she knows how much you care for her, she wants you to know she cares for you just as much. thank you so much for writing this beautiful piece of art for your friend.
manyblessings2u & yours always.
Joyce
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Hi Joyce
love your comment to me
You always say such nice things
I appreate your kindness to me
You are a great friend
Love Rick
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Rick...
You've taken parts from some of your best poems, mixed them with a few new ones, and out comes this beautiful, soft, lovely piece of poetry. I recognize much of this...but perhaps that is because I've been looking at your poetry almost non-stop for the last 3 days?
Only one correction that I found...(Have you found a new spelling fairy? lol)
"and give my self(myself) to you"
You have such a wonderful way of expressing intimate love, which is so different than simply being "sexual love". I know the depth of which you are capable of loving and caring for a woman, evident not just from your words but from your actions. Whether for a friend or a lover, any woman is blessed to have you in her corner.
You didn't leave me as speechless as Bob's poem this morning did, but you are dang close. What a pair the two of you are. Wherever it is you've learned so much about women (beyond Cosmo, that is! lol) it was a lesson you obviously paid good attention to.
My best wishes to both you and your friend. Sometimes "secret" has rewards all of its own.
Much love,
~J.
P.S. I'm making lasagna. I'd send you some, but I'm fresh out of $50.00 stamps. LOL
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CoolTrista, love the legs
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Rick,
this is amazingly beautiful
sensual and intimate with a feeling of comfort
like laying with the one you love in silence with a warm fire on a snowy day
both you and Bob have brought me to tears this morning with such compelling words of love and longing
lovely, every word
much love and blessings,
Michelle
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Sweet Michelle
Thank you so much for appreating my words
If you cried, it is because your heart and experances render this so
I thank you for your care in these thoughts
Love, Rick
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Exceptionally roooomantic...the lover's undying ardor for the beloved...well and ably done here (you have a typo in the first line) bravo
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Eusebius
Thank you for reading this
and for your kind words to me
I can not spell
Please give me the correction
Rick
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in secret.... I love the way you write still so slow and carefully sensual. deeply written with beautiful images of buds on buds of flying lilies and the scent of your love flowing like the smiles of a river.
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Aurielle
Your comment to me
is almost verse in it`s self
Thank you so much for reading this
Rick
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"from your care
I will give my life to you
as a gift to your heart"
absolutely simple and powerful verse.Amazing how youd want to give your life for love -
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Rudd
In my mind
In my heart
There is on compermising words in thoughts of love
Just the imposing emotion of absolute wonder for a woman
From that platou I make my words
Thank you for reading and commenting
Rick
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So gentle and soft, tender moments of romance shared with the one you adore. Sensual and caring, with a sense of need and longing. Really a sweet and inviting write for all who read it.
Lovely work!
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Kimberly
Thank you for liking my words
There is a touch of need and longing
Thank you for saying inviting
Rick
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Beautiful Words!
Rick it is good to have a read of your words.This is so gentle,all the way through.There are so many parts of this free verse love poem that touch the heart"giving myself with tender tears for the joy of having found you""from your care I will give my life to you as a gift to your heart and love you for all you have become to me in secret" Beautiful words as always!
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Hi Rosemary
Thank you for reading this
I apperate you quoting me
Your comment was beautiful
Rick
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So sensual, so provocative. Yet, so romantic...sigh, wish we all could have someone to say these loving words. Ok, yes omg this is great...you'veleft me speechless and that is so hard to do. ~Sie
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Hi Sie
I liked the feel of the words as I made them
perhaps they are better than my first impressions
Thank you for saying romantic
Appreate your thoughts
Rick
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OMG
Rick,
I'm a grown man, I can't continue to cry in public when I read your poetry.
Most romantic:
and send away time
and close the world
around us... from us
and fade away the day
to dwell with you
alone
in the night
Most beautiful:
and give my self to you
with tender tears
for the joy
of having found you
and look
within your wondrous eyes
for the signs of love
I adore in you
Beautiful beyond my words.
Love you, Brother
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Bob
You and Brenda are crying together... lol
I am pleased you like these words
Trista will reconize a portion of them
She knows my writing almost by heart now
I think it is her AP wife duty, lol
Thank you for quoting so much
Your little big brother, Rick
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I stand with my hand upon my heart and a tear in my eye. Silented by the beauty.
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Marianne
Now that is a nice complement
and a better comment
Thanks for saying "Silented by the beauty"
How sweet
Rick
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{{sniffle, sniffle}}
Rick: This is an absolutely beautiful write and a friend would be honored to be on the receiving side of this write. The following words touched me in a way that only few know.
"...and look
within your wondrous eyes
for the signs of love
I adore in you"
The 'signs of love' are only obvious to those who are entrusted by your friend, in short, it is a glorious thing that you can see those signs of love...
Another...
"from your care
I will give my life to you
as a gift to your heart
and love you
for all you have become to me
in secret"
Your friend is a lucky individual for your to offer your life, love and commitment as a friend "in secret".
Keep the flow going and good luck to you... ** TO YOUR FRIEND: Cherish and love these words, they are yours to keep forever.**
Tonya
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Hi Tonya
Well
So far I got the best reaction from you
and my brother Bob
The same words that you like and quoted
are the same I liked as I made the words
You are almost passing Trista on the leinght of the comment
Thank you for your lovely comment and friendship
Rick
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heartwarming words shared and written so nicely.
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Dawn
Hi, thank you for reading this
Thank you for your thoughts
Rick
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beautiful!
So sacred are secrets of the heart....
Love between two spirits...
"and give my self to you
with tender tears
for the joy
of having found you"
So lovely, my friend!
Lynda
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Hi linda
I always appreciate your comments
This is so true
So sacred are secrets of the heart....
Love between two spirits...
Thank you for reading
Rick
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This is beautiful, Rick!!!! Very well written!!!! And the sentiment is so completly loving!!!! I loooooove it!!!!
~DAWN~
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Hi Dawn
Always love to have you read my writing
Thank you for looooooving it...lol
Your sweet
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Your welcome!
~DAWN~
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Again, soft flowing words and a soothing feel as I read. Your trademark perhaps...ha! This was a lovely write Rick and once again, my pleasure to read ~Tia
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Tia
If that is a trademark
I am very pleased
Thank you for reading me
Rick
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"And give myself to you with tender tears for the joy of having found you" Such a intimate vision with heartfelt tears of joy that all should be able to experience if even in secrets. "from your care i will give my life to you as a gift to your heart".
A gift of pure devotion and love is felt hear in the heart of your words. Beautiful,warm and loving write to your friend.
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Bren
Thank you for feeling my words
I love your comment to me
I am honered to be quoted
Rick
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And very beautiful words they are! Caressed the heart and soul with a very fluid and amazing emotion...So precious too. Smiles, Terry
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Hi Terry
Thank you for reading this
I wanted to enter somthing in your contest
but I can`t find anything I like that you have not read...lol
I am pleased you like my writing
Rick
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