I can almost feel wind on my cheek....
I can almost see the tears on the floor....
I can almost hear the screams,...
sobs that radiate the air around me.
I can run in all directions,...
yet I'm not going anywhre.
It's dark within me...and I try to block it out
but the darkness only gets stronger.
I can almost scream out for help..
But what's stopping me?
I can almost feel a soft warm hand around me,
Or is it what's holding me back.
I can almost fight back,
But it hurts me.....
I was alsmost saved...
But only Almost.
Please tell me what you think
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the thing about life is sometimes you gotta save yourself. It's tough and you don't always want to, but you gotta pull yourself up sometimes. This i think was the best poem you've ever wrote, my opinon only, but hey. There you go.
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you're doing a very great job of keeping the secret reason of your pain hidden while still being able to let the reader know exactly what amount of pain it truly is...this is one of my favorites so far hunny. i love you and we'll talk later about the reason...i'm going through it too...well sort of.
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This is great. Theres an element of simplicity to it, but theres complexity that lies within the poem. Theres like a hidden meaning in the poem. I like the way you ended it.. "I was almost saved, but only almost" It gives strong emotion, nice and deep!
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This could be a metaphor for life. Confusing, yet straightforward with uturns, and obtuse angles.
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I think you are one of tthe only people II know in the world who would comeup with something that backwards. Or as you would say backwards and forwards. Thanx!
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