1. Cotton Candy's
2. The Pink Platter
3. In The Pink
4. McPinkies
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A contest entry
- Help me finish the project that's in my head. by bird at rose.
450 points, ended April 25, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Stylish In Some
The title is only cute by that you took something pink to call her by. But, at least to me, it doesn't reserve health rights to be thought of when entering the luncheonette.
You made a simple, clean name in the second, "The Pink Platter." It invites everyone in a soft tone to eat at the one big plate of the restaurant. Oops, it was a little catchy in criteria when I read it.
The 2nd one upward, "In The Pink" is like saying, come on into the health hole, this is the real stuff inside. When you're in the ditch of controlling yourself with eating, it's like a seat belt from the field, you can concentrate easier. This is a good try and it passed the criteria quiz buzz.
Hee-haw, I got a small laugh from, "McPinkies" because you seem to have translated true meals from McDonalds [however, she has to try her best with the strength of her business]. In criteria, this slurred on my throat.
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The Pink Platter catches my eyes, but all are quite clever. Well done! Good luck in the contest.
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okay, this is interesting, but i can see it is for a contest, i like in the pink, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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McPinkie's is just so adorable a take-off on McDonald's, but my favorite of these name-choices of yours would be "In the Pink." For a new restaurant business, it's a lot better name choice than "In the Red!"
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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