My back to the rock as i lie on high
turning my face to the sky.
In my thoughts flying like a fly
The winds caressing
My soul posessing
I am not sleeping
I am only dreaming
The wonders of nature revealing.
My eyes to his majesty
That's the hills in their dynasty
Standing, towering informidably.
The sun in it's golden splendour
So warm and so tender
Igniting my soul like an ember.
The waters cascading
My soul it is cleansing
Such peace and quietude unending.
So who am i to resist
So natural a bliss?
That the lids of my eyes starts to kiss.
And in that silent embrace
I was carried into space
And for a moment i saw heaven's face.
Then the heavens start to cry
And as i opened my eyes
The waters rushed silently by. (Then i said to my self).........
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A contest entry
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345 points, ended March 29, 2007, 23 entries
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wow this is a really elaborate piece... especially at the end you seemed to go big (well before the end I didn't really like the last stanza)... I really enjoyed the the sun scenes and the water one... they were like very descriptive... so much I could see it in my head... this was a very interesting piece... well anyways thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest.
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The flow in this poem if very tranquil and definitely conveys a feel of Serenity in nature. Thank you for inspiring me!
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a beautiful poem,with my favourite running all through it [nature].Keep writing and best wishes
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Aww I like htis poem! THe rhyme was good, but almost too much.... my favorite part was:
"So who am i to resist
So natural a bliss?
That the lids of my eyes starts to kiss."
great write
Luv always
Jenae
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Welcome to AllPoetry
I liked in thoughts of flying like a fly
Your poem conjures up nice visuals and sounds in keeping with the scenery you describe. It has the feel of serenity to say the least.
Keep em coming and again, welcome to the site. -
smiley
"So who am i to resist
So natural a bliss?
That the lids of my eyes starts to kiss."
Ah, the sunshine. Dubtastic! -
So who am i to resist
So natural a bliss?
That the lids of my eyes starts to kiss
Beautiful lines
Thnaks you -
first of all, welcome to All Poetry. secondly, i really like this write from you. the rhyme is awesome and the flow is nice. i am interested to read more from you. viyanna rosemarie
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Interesting. I would recommend you use spell check on this. (Also, just a note: the artwork isn't accurate. Yellow is a primary color - green and red do not mix to form yellow...lol.)
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Peaceful
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