Surrendered have I mind and soul
Abandoned at your feet
Desire for power was my goal
On life-path bitter-sweet
Seduction through my body’s grace
I well knew how to use
Enchanting smile on charming face
In rainbow-coloured hues
Though gifts shall never be abused
For ego’s selfish gain
My talents often I’ve misused
Through altered mind insane
Oh Jaguar, dear Spirit-Guide
Reveal your medicine
Please free me from the mask of pride
For kindness to be seen
So I may learn integrity
Compassion shown to all
In pure impeccability
Responding to your Call
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Responding to your Call
In pure impeccability
Compassion shown to all
So I may learn integrity
For kindness to be seen
Please free me from the mask of pride
Reveal your medicine
Oh Jaguar, dear Spirit-Guide
Through altered mind insane
My talents often I’ve misused
For ego’s selfish gain
Though gifts shall never be abused
In rainbow-coloured hues
Enchanting smile on charming face
I well knew how to use
Seduction through my body’s grace
On life-path bitter-sweet
Desire for power was my goal
Abandoned at your feet
Surrendered have I mind and soul
Author notes
dedicated to Celticmoon http://allpoetry.com/Celticmoon
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Painting : “The Enchantress” by Arthur Wardle
Border by Celticmoon http://allpoetry.com/list/37926-Animal-Borders
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METERED MIRROR-RHYME in alternating iambic tetrameter and iambic trimeter – with an abab cdcd rhyme-scheme
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this poem won a BRONZE TROPHY in poet2angel's contest :
"enchantress" http://allpoetry.com/contest/2342742
In a list
A contest entry
- Enchantress ...(picture inspired contest) by poet2angels.
475 points, ended March 19, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Certainly Is a super writing
a lot of effort and work went into this.....very well done.....desreving a cup......Ive never done one of these...perhaps one day.....if I dont give up writing...but yep.....this is super in my eyes.....congratulations Maa
Malabu
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hehe, you make me laugh already ... because you write like I do ... with all those dotties in between your thoughts ... I was told that they are called ellypses ... I had no idea ... thanksie for your kind visit ... and the clapping bunnies ...
maa
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Applause
sorry, an oversight!
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It seems to me that the jaguar is a spirit one must meet in the maturing process. Your verse is good, and full of imagery. Best of luck!
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I was very scared to face the jaguar-spirit ... and my hesitation and retention might be felt through my words ... I felt like he should better stay in a distance for the moment, although there is a longing to integrate the medicine of this sacred spirit ... yet, I don't perceive it as a gift that will be given lightly ... it certainly must be deserved ... my poem was intended to invoke, provoke and invite the necessary situations into my life, where I may be put to the test ...
I feel jaguar silently watching from afar, patiently recording each and every thought that I emit and action that I initiate ...
"maturing process" sounds like the perfect term for this ...
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Wow this is amazing, I so enjoyed reading it. I love this style of writing too. Just an excellent write
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thank you so much, dear theresa ... I really hope you are well ...
maa
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As an exercise in writing to form
you have managed very well. The theme of feline seduction controlling and enjoying sheer animal power informs the form and is, perhaps, not as forceful as I would have liked. Yet, maa, I could not have written as you have. As animals, we think as humans but do not escape the desires of all animals even though ours are cerebrated.
Cheers from Ron.
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I understand your point, dear ron, and thank you for your constructive suggestions ... the way I wrote this poem was that I read about the medicine this power-animal bestows when invoked, which are integrity, impeccability and the protection against the abuse of power ... then, I connected with those qualities, tried to receive them within my heart, and waited what would happen ... then, I actually realized when and in which way I had not acted in my life using those virtues ... it was a bit painful, but also very instructive ... a gentle process alltogether ... and since I have gone through this process of initiation, so to say, I feel a great shift within me ... a lot of guilt left me and I feel a lot of gentleness coming from the jaguar-spirit I feared so much ...
I owe this experience to my sweet sister bel (celticmoon) ... she guided me towards jaguar and taught me how to get rid of my fears ... at least some of them ...
thank you for your patience in listening to this crazy little girl,
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Dear Marion
You are not crazy but mystical. Let us face it,the greatest mystical poet I know of was William Blake who wrote that ever fascinating "Tyger! Tyger! Burning bright". Keep up this effort for self and for us.
Your rhyme scheme is involved yet does not impede your passion.
Kindest regards,
Ron.
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how did you know ?
I must find this tyger-poem you are speaking about ... and shall soak in its energy ...
you are right about the lack of passion in this poem, it is fear that holds me back ...
but since the light of consciousness has been shed on this issue - thank you for your hint - this phantom will certainly dissolve soon ...
I appreciate your wise advice, dear ron ... there's certainly a reason for your family-name
maarion
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nice form and integrated use of animal powers and human attributes. Blue
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thank you for your appreciative comment, dear blue rew ... nice to meet you
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applaud
I like this style, its cool
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thank you for your kind words and applause ...
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beautiful!
I love this form when you do it, maa...
So beautiful and spiritual with magical tone and grace....
"For kindness to be seen
Please free me from the mask of pride
Reveal your medicine
Oh Jaguar, dear Spirit-Guide"
Very unique and wonderful!
Lynda
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thank you again so much for this wonderful award for my poem, dear lynda ... I guess that jaguar-spirit has been listening to my plea and wanted to let me know through you ...
I love angels - and I love animal-spirits
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I adore Angels My house is filled with them....I love animals as well....You know, when I get upset and feel sad, my doggie Molly always cheers me up...She is glued to me 24/7 and sleeps in the bend of my knees every night.....My kids are grown, but I have her
Your poem and your wonderful spirit couldn't help remind me of my dear friend Timothy (lionslove) here on Ap who passed away in December.....who is now and Angel and an animal spirit
Your poem touched me.....
Lynda
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I actually expected this jaguar-poem to be a bit more "wild" - so to say, but was actually happy with the gentleness that this spirit-guide and the poetess to whom it is dedicated, inspired me ...
thank you for your wonderful comment and applause, lynda ...
marion
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Marion,
I cannot thank you enough for this most wonderful and touching gift. You flatter me so with the use of your word and talent. Your purity and compassion, kindness and love has brought me to tears many times over. I am truly blessed to have had my path come to cross with your own. You are a truly blessing to all whos path you cross. You are amazing! From the bottom of my heart and soul, thank you
Blessings
Bel
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your words touch me very much, dear bel ... thank you for having inspired me this poem ... I added your wonderful jaguar-border to the poem, so I can see "her look" each time I come to this page ...
marion
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you have put forth much of yourself into this wonderful write. it's beautiful and i actually think i like it reversed even better. though the journey is neverending, you're experiences have taught you much. you are a great person and i am blessed to know you.
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thank you so much, dear wolfspiritguide, for your delightful visit ! it is so nice to see you stop by ... I hope you are well ...
all the best,
marion
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Beautiful
You are so talented and have a look of pure serenity. The words you use are perfect and your rhyme is impeccable. I'm hoping to learn from you and imbibe some of your skill. You are so clever!! Thank you and good luck in the contest SR
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thank you so much for such a sweet and kind comment, dear swanridur, as well as for your generous applause ... I am sure that you already have more than enough talent and skill, and who knows, I might learn from you as well !
marion
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