Do not be afraid
Do not hide your eyes
Let them know that you are strong
Leave off your disguise
Find joy in what is real
Do not lose faith for what is not
And of losses at your best
give not a second thought
Forget not who you were
For that is why you are
Each step has great importance
even when it leaves a scar
So do not be afraid
and Do not hide your eyes
When skies are the limit
You must be your skies
Author notes
I don't have as much time lately as I wish I had. So be gentle, please Hee hee
for Snow White Queen's contest: Option 2
In a list
A contest entry
- Suicide--- whatever +eye roll+ by Rizzo-in-the-box.
600 points, ended July 1, 2007, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Help! i really need some inspiration by lucy sky-diamond.
600 points, ended July 14, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
La di da
Comments
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Nice job.I like it,I also think you should leave out the word "for" when I stumbled upon it I was like it would sound better if that little word wasn't there.you did a nice job.Keep up the good work.
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Each step has great importance
even when it leaves a scar
beautiful lines!
this poem is truly beautiful in itself, wonderful message and ideas, and great rhyme, thank youvery much for your entry, and good luck
lucy
xxx
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Great poem, loved these lines: Forget not who you were
For that is why you are, and the final 2 lines. The flow and rhyme were also really good. Well done -
Forget not who you were
For that is why you are
those lines were my favorite. The flow is a bit rough and some lines a bit "overused" but it's a good poem still.
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For when the skies are the limit
You must be your skies ... I really like that a lot, but I think it needs tightening. Try leaving out the word for. I don't think the meaning changes and I think it tightens the rhyme. Just a suggestion.
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Thanks, I took out "the," too. So...
So do not be afraid
and Do not hide your eyes
When skies are the limit
You must be your skies
...Yeah?
Thanks
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Ok before I even start to read this I gotta say I'm feelin' the title...
"And of losses at your best
give not a second thought"
XDDDDDDDDDDDD I LOVES IT! XD
"Each step has great importance
even when it leaves a scar"
YOU are a poet after my own HEART!
three claps for you... you automaticaly get points!
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"Each step has great importance
even when it leaves a scar"
I love those lines. This piece is very beautiful, and fits the option. the ending too, is just perfect. Very nicely written! -
Inspired
This poem is great. Im not very eloquent. Thank you for this.
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Damn, that ending is killer! I love this one.
For when the skies are the limit
You must be your skies....
What an incredible idea! Where did that come from?!
Talk to you later, sweetheart.
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I Found...
So many great nuggetts within this write. And they are shining brightly.
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I really liked this one.The subjbect was great and it's very inspiratunal.Most poems make me feel emo and stuff,so it's a good chnage from the norm.
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facing the fear
yes...face the fear and move forward! nice write and inspiring. thanx so much for entering and all the best to you...peace & blessings
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I think you have done an excellent job with this beautiful write, and I love the message woven inside each line. A reall lovely enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this and good luck in the contest. Well done.
Shaz xx
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