Beaten and splintered she never gives in
Bandaged and bleeding she tries to break free
She pounds and claws again and again
She’s not backing down, it’s easy to see
Her spirit is powerful, driving her on
Her vigor is endless, eyes full of passion
She’ll fight with a purpose past break of dawn
Searching her soul in a tedious fashion
Nearly blinded from blood stained tears
Nicked and bruised from her ongoing struggle
Softly a voice whispers in her ears
Saying she’ll raise above all the rubble
The gleam in her eye in no way dims
Torn but bursting with determination
Holding on tightly her journey begins
Hindered no more by her trepidation…
Author notes
This was a fun challenge for me. I even challenged myself more than I had to. (notice the beginning letter of each line)
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired 6 by February Moon.
300 points, ended March 22, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This was good. I enjoy the rhyming scheme in it, you did it very well. I like how you described not what has happened to her, but the emotion behind it all. I do not think I have seen a poem written like this one before, with the letters at the beginnings of the lines. Best of luck in my contest, and thank you for entering.
Chelsea
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Grim raw determintation! You conveyed it well and it fit the picture marvelously. I bet you got that strength from the look in her eyes on the picture didn't you? Oh you tapped into that well here. The double first letters pairing the beginings of the lines like that is different to say the least. I don't think I've ever seen that before. Nice job there too!
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