as innocent as a new born babe
they said
you knew nothing about anything
and he took that all away
showing you more than
what you needed to understsand
at the age of four
just a child
who learned that boys
do not care what age you are
as long as you have
the body part(s) they want
you are fair game
be you daughter, sister,
cousin, relative
life isn't fair
but then neither was he
A contest entry
- 24 hours - INNOCENCE by misselaineous.
300 points, ended March 18, 2007, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Sad reality
such not be learned at an early age as this. tugs at the heartstrings leaving a bitter after thought....I can't put my finger on why....even being a man...but I know it exist and I can only imagine the falt...wonderful write Grans.....you are just simply a fabulas writer in my eyes......and heart....
Mal
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this poem touched a personal chord in me, and the loss of innocence in this way is deplorable in every sense of the word...
it is written in a very young voice, almost that of the child - not 'fair' is a word that a four year old might use i think ...
thank you for entering this poem in my contest which oddly [wrong word]i posted as i struggled with my own feelings around lost innocence. There have been many entries and this is one poem that captured what i was seeking...
elaine
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ALRIGHT
A truth that goes beyond words.Most girls today think that the guy really loves them.When in fact like you have penned they are out to score big time.Only thing I could never figure out is they wanted to marry virgins but they try to tag all they could,go figure.
Good Penning
Good Luck in your contest
~Cheryl~ -
Yes, it isn't fair. That doesn't mean he had the right to invade a child. People like that are sick in the mind.
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this is one of the few issues that move me to violence..a strong statement was made in this...you just laid it out on the line..no frills..I like that with these types of issues..
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Brilliantly touching
Perhaps we need to have a few of these poems sent out to the world to touch those hard cold hearts who allow these things to happen.
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touching
this was a very touching poem...very well written....great write.
if you could please check out some of my poems.
redderthenroses
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splendid
A nice touching poem that confuses a bit in the end that what it intend to say about the plight of the little kid. -
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Not sure what part is confusing here - can you be more specific?
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