No where to go unable to run
Terror strikes the hearts of the young
Left to die for the battle their losing
Tears escaping her last breath releasing
Such lives are lost in the dark of the night
Author notes
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i used this for my poem
For a contest
A contest entry
- Quickie by Hadji Murad.
300 points, ended April 6, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love it...I think that it has nice flow and I can see the picture in my head.
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This is nice, but I don't see a tremendous power in it.
It's kind of shallow. I would recommend doing something to deepen the poem. Thank you for entering and best of luck.
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nice poem. i really liked this
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I'm not sure if you meant loosing or losing.
Anyways, amazing. You know I always love your work
Very moving. Reminds me of ...well some things, nerdy things actually. Eh, it reminds me of a book I once read, how's that?
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The poem fits the title perfectly! ~You set the scene really well.
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