A whisper of wings
Soft as silk strings
A chime on the breeze
Weaves through the trees
Soft as silk strings
A flicker that brings
Mysterious hints
Of faerie like glints
A chime on the breeze
So thrilled to tease
Butterfly motion
In sylvan commotion
Weaves through the trees
With pixie like ease
A small breath of the Fae
Or my fancy at play?
Author notes
I got to thinking what it might be like to catch a brief glimpse of a fairy. Not enough to know for sure. Just enough to wonder and maybe confuse it for a butterfly or the breeze. I think a faerie would find that quite amusing.
This form is called retourne and the only requirement is the repeating line sequence. They do not have to rhyme.
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A contest entry
- The Enchanted Realm Members Only !!!! by Darc Soul.
450 points, ended March 29, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A good write and skillfully crafted retourne. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Nice depth of feeling. Nice rhythm. Good word choice and alliteration. Well penned.
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This was lovely. It flowed together perfectly and you had me hooked the entire time. Great job!
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Wonderful job on this and another trophy I see
Well written and certainly a thought provoking write for me as I remember often as a child wanting deserately to believe in fairies and to see one one day...I could not imagine my reaction. Lovely write, congrats on the trophy and once again, a pleasure to read your work ~Tia
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<3 This flows great. Lovely poem, good topic...
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that was a very good poem and i liked the format of it very much
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Nice to see different forms on this site. Good for you that you try different kinds of poetry. Have never tried this before. Looks easy enough - liked the pictures you paint with your words.
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i chuckle sometimes when i read these writes. i have some relatives who, before their adoption, had the last name of ferry so... i can honestly say i have seen an entire family of them. this was so cute. i wish you the best of luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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